自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and organized: start with a clear topic sentence saying whether you had a bike, then give one or two specific supporting details (who used it and why you couldn’t ride). Reduce filler words (uh, um) and correct grammar (e.g. “a bike” not “a like”, and plural/singular consistency). Use a linking word when adding the supporting detail.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I couldn’t ride it. For example, my older sister used it most of the time because she taught herself to cycle, while I was still learning. As a result, the bike stayed in our yard and I watched her ride it often.

建議: Answer directly and give specific reasons or examples. Reduce hesitation and repetition (e.g., avoid repeating ‘bike’). Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) to connect your points. Improve vocabulary by saying “cycling” or “bicycle” and mention who cycles and where (commuters, students, parks).

範例: Yes, I think cycling is quite popular in my country. For example, many people join local cycling clubs and commuters use bicycles to avoid traffic, especially in the city center. Because of better bike lanes and weekend group rides, more people are taking up cycling nowadays.

× Uh, I had a like but I could not ride a bike.

✓ Uh, I had a bike but I could not ride it.

The original sentence uses the vague phrase 'a like' and omits a pronoun for 'bike'. Replace 'a like' with 'a bike' and use the object pronoun 'it' to refer back to 'bike' for correct pronoun use and clarity.

× So uh, my sisters, only my sister used that bike.

✓ So, only my sister used that bike.

The phrase 'my sisters, only my sister' is redundant and unclear. Remove 'my sisters' and keep 'only my sister' to correctly indicate that a single sister used the bike. This fixes pronoun/noun phrase confusion and improves clarity.

× Yes, of course, umm, some people joined the bike club, uh, that is umm that gathered people who la loved the bike.

✓ Yes, of course. Some people joined a bike club that gathered people who love bikes.

The original sentence has disfluent fillers and tense/mismatch issues. Change 'joined the bike club' to 'joined a bike club' if speaking generally, remove fillers, and use present tense 'love' to match a habitual/general statement. Also simplify 'gathered people who loved the bike' to 'gathered people who love bikes' for grammaticality and natural expression.

× So I think in my country bike riding a bike is very popular.

✓ So I think bike riding is very popular in my country.

The original word order is awkward and repetitive ('bike riding a bike'). Rearrange to 'bike riding is very popular in my country' and remove the duplicate noun. Using present simple 'is' correctly expresses a general fact about current popularity.