自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and correct tenses, use a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect word choices (e.g. writing → riding, expensive → inexpensive/beneficial) and reduce filler words. Aim for 3–4 sentences and use past tense when talking about childhood.

範例: Yes, I had a small red bike when I was a child. I rode it every day around my neighborhood, especially after school, which helped me build confidence and stamina. Now I ride a larger bike for exercise on weekends.

建議: Start with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons using linking words. Avoid vague claims (e.g. "it can get us smarter") and filler sounds. Use vocabulary appropriate to context like "environmentally friendly," "convenient," "healthy," and give one concrete example or comparison.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in the summer. They are a convenient and environmentally friendly way to travel, and they also promote physical fitness; for instance, many people cycle to work or college instead of driving during warm months.

× I ride that every single day.

✓ I rode it every single day.

The context is about childhood (past), so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Ride' is present tense; change to 'rode'. Also replace the demonstrative 'that' with the pronoun 'it' for natural reference to the bike. Suggestion: Use past tense verbs when describing past events, and use 'it' to refer back to a singular noun previously mentioned.

× And now I'm writing a bigger bike.

✓ And now I have a bigger bike.

The student likely intended to say they now possess a bigger bike. 'I'm writing' is incorrect because 'write' does not mean 'own'; also the present continuous with 'writing' is wrong verb. Use 'have' to express possession in present simple. Suggestion: Match the verb to the intended meaning (possession = 'have'). Use present simple to state current facts.

× I think this is a really great activity to do and a really relaxing and and expensive thing for people.

✓ I think riding a bike is a really great activity, a very relaxing activity, and an inexpensive thing for people.

There are multiple issues: repetition ('and and'), wrong adjective 'expensive' contradicts the intended meaning (bikes are usually inexpensive), and unclear reference 'this'—better to use 'riding a bike'. Also use 'an' before a vowel-starting adjective and parallel structure for list items. Suggestion: Use parallel structure when listing qualities, choose the correct adjective (inexpensive vs expensive), and avoid duplicate words.

× Umm I think that bikes are popular in my country and summer because this is really convenient and eco friendly umm transport and it is really good for our brain and thinking and it can get us smarter.

✓ I think that bikes are popular in my country in summer because they are a very convenient and eco-friendly form of transport, and they are good for our brains and thinking; they can help make us smarter.

Problems include incorrect preposition/placement ('in my country and summer' should be 'in my country in summer'), singular/plural and pronoun agreement ('this' should be 'they' to refer to bikes), missing hyphen in 'eco-friendly', awkward phrasing 'brain and thinking', and run-on structure. Also 'transport' is countable/uncountable contextually—use 'form of transport'. Suggestion: Place time expressions ('in summer') correctly after location, maintain pronoun agreement (plural 'they' for 'bikes'), hyphenate compound adjectives, and break long sentences into clearer clauses.