自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar (tense consistency and articles), clarity and coherence by using a clear topic sentence then 1–2 supporting details. Use linking words (for example, then, also) and correct verbs/articles (e.g., “was”, “a”, “an”). Avoid irrelevant or unclear phrases like “I got accident from it.” Be concise (max 5 sentences).

範例: Yes, I did. My first bike was a pink one that I received when I was in elementary school. Later I had a red tricycle for a few years, and then I rode a regular bicycle, which I once crashed but recovered from quickly.

建議: Make the response direct and grammatically correct: use a clear topic sentence stating your view, then give 1–2 specific reasons with linking words (because, so, therefore). Correct subject-verb agreement and verb forms (e.g., “No, they aren’t”, “people don’t usually use bikes”). Be specific about contexts (time of day, climate) and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: No, bikes are not very popular in my country. This is mainly because the climate is often very hot and humid, especially in the afternoon, so many people prefer motorcycles. Also, long distances and lack of cycling lanes mean bicycles are less practical for daily commuting.

× Yes I did. My first bike is pink, I got it when I was in elementary school.

✓ Yes, I did. My first bike was pink; I got it when I was in elementary school.

The sentence refers to past experiences, so verbs should be in the past tense. 'is' should be 'was' to match 'I did' and 'I got.' Also add commas/semicolon for clarity.

× My second bike is a tricycle and it's red.

✓ My second bike was a tricycle and it was red.

Describing a past possession requires past tense. 'is' and 'it's' should be 'was' and 'it was.' Maintain past tense consistently when talking about childhood.

× My third bike is a bicycle which I got accident from it too.

✓ My third bike was a bicycle which I had an accident with, too.

The original sentence has awkward structure and incorrect verb forms. Use past tense 'was' for possession. 'got accident from it' is ungrammatical; use 'had an accident with it' or 'I had an accident on it.' Remove redundant pronoun 'it' when rephrasing.

× No it isn't compared to a motorcycle because my country is very hot during the lunch time or in the afternoon the temperature is very high and it's very humid so people doesn't usually using bike.

✓ No, they aren't as common as motorcycles because my country is very hot at lunchtime or in the afternoon, the temperature is very high and it's very humid, so people don't usually use bikes.

Multiple issues: subject-verb agreement—'people' is plural so use 'don't' not 'doesn't.' Incorrect verb form 'using' should be base form 'use' after 'usually.' 'isn't compared to a motorcycle' is awkward; better: 'they aren't as common as motorcycles.' Also adjust articles and prepositions: 'at lunchtime' not 'during the lunch time.' Ensure plural consistency: 'bikes' or 'they.'