自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammatical accuracy and sentence structure: give a direct topic sentence, then add one or two clear supporting details using linking words. Use past tense consistently, correct pronouns and articles, and avoid unnecessary repetition. Keep the response to about 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. When I was nine my father bought me a brand-new, bright red bike, and I used to ride it around the neighborhood park every afternoon. I felt very happy because it gave me freedom to explore my area.

建議: Make the answer more natural and specific: start with a clear opinion, then give two specific reasons with linking words (for example, 'because' and 'also'). Use more formal vocabulary (avoid 'wanna') and correct collocations (e.g., 'to keep fit' or 'to save money'). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people ride bicycles to keep fit because cycling is good exercise, and others use them to save money and avoid traffic, so cycling is a practical daily choice for commuting.

× Yes I am.

✓ Yes, I did.

The student responded to a past-tense question ('Did you have a bike when you were a child?') and used 'am' (present tense, copula) which is incorrect. Use the past auxiliary 'did' for short answers to 'Did' questions. Suggestion: answer with 'Yes, I did.' or 'No, I didn't.' to match the past-tense question.

× I still remember that is when I was 9 my dad bought me a bike that is a brand new model.

✓ I still remember that when I was nine my dad bought me a brand-new bike.

The original mixes tenses and inserts unnecessary 'is' twice ('that is when' and 'that is a brand new model'), causing awkward structure. Remove extra 'is', use 'when I was nine' for age, and hyphenate 'brand-new' as a compound adjective before the noun. Suggestion: simplify to a single past-tense clause: 'I still remember that when I was nine my dad bought me a brand-new bike.'

× It has bright red and I sat on it then roll around the neighborhood park.

✓ It was bright red, and I sat on it and rolled around the neighborhood park.

The sentence uses present tense 'has' and base verb 'roll' while the context is past; also 'bright red' should be described with 'was' for past appearance. Change verbs to past tense ('was', 'sat', 'rolled') and add a conjunction for clarity. Suggestion: maintain past tense throughout: 'It was bright red, and I sat on it and rolled around the neighborhood park.'

× I feel happy about it.

✓ I felt happy about it.

The memory is described in the past, so the emotion should be in past tense. Using present simple 'feel' implies a current feeling; use past simple 'felt' to match the narrative. Suggestion: use consistent past tense when narrating past events.

× Yes, I think bikes are kind of popular in my country because besides some people wanna ride a bike to training their health, some people wanna save the money, so they choose to ride a bike every day.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because some people want to ride a bike to improve their health, and others want to save money, so they choose to ride a bike every day.

Multiple issues: 'wanna' is informal and nonstandard for written correction; 'to training their health' incorrectly uses a gerund and verb form — use 'to improve their health'; 'save the money' should be 'save money' (no article). Also 'besides' is unnecessary and awkward here. Suggestion: use standard forms: 'want to' instead of 'wanna', 'improve their health' for purpose, and 'save money' without 'the'. Use 'and others' to contrast groups.