自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문법과 문장 구조를 바로잡고 자연스럽게 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다. 특히 과거형 사용(rode → riding 혹은 rode correctly), 불필요한 말더듬(um, or) 제거, 주제문과 부가 설명을 명확히 구분하세요. 예: 먼저 주제문으로 답하고, 이어서 구체적 활동(누구와, 언제, 무엇을 즐겼는지)을 연결어(‘because’, ‘and’, ‘when’)로 자연스럽게 연결하세요.

範例: Yes, I did. I often rode my bike with my dad when I was a child, and we would cycle to the park on weekends because he loved teaching me new tricks.

建議: 유창성(um, uh 제거)과 어휘 선택(‘public bicycle’ → ‘shared bikes’ 혹은 ‘bike-sharing services’), 그리고 문장 완결성 보완이 필요합니다. 이유를 말할 때는 링크 표현(‘because’, ‘therefore’, ‘for example’)을 사용하고 구체적 근거(숫자, 장소, 상황)를 덧붙이세요. 또한 과거·현재 시제 일치에 유의하세요(used → use).

範例: Yes, I do. Shared bike services are very common in my city, so many people use bicycles for short trips, especially to commute or run errands.

× I really enjoyed rode my bike with my dad when I was young or.

✓ I really enjoyed riding my bike with my dad when I was young.

'Enjoy' is followed by a verb+ -ing form (gerund). 'Rode' is past tense and incorrect after 'enjoyed'. Use 'riding' to indicate the activity enjoyed. Also remove the extraneous 'or' at the end.

× Yes, I do uh, because umm, these days it is very easy to see the public bicycle in my city uh, so a lot of people used dead bikes umm, when they.

✓ Yes, I do, because these days it is very easy to see public bicycles in my city, so a lot of people use shared bikes.

The sentence mixes past tense 'used' with present context 'these days'. Use present simple 'use' for habitual actions. 'Public bicycle' should be plural 'public bicycles' and 'dead bikes' appears to be a mispronunciation; 'shared bikes' or 'public bikes' is appropriate. Also remove filler words and incomplete ending 'when they.'