自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear and concise, which is good, but you can improve by adding one or two specific supporting details to make it more engaging and natural. Start with a direct topic sentence (you did), then briefly explain why you had a scooter (reason), where you used it, or a short memory to enrich the response. Use a linking word such as “because” or “so” to connect ideas.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child; I had a scooter instead because it was cheaper and easier to store. For example, I used it to ride to my friend’s house and around the small park near our apartment, which helped me feel independent.

建議: Your response addresses the question and gives reasons, but it is a little repetitive and some sentences are unclear (e.g., last sentence). Improve clarity by using concise topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details and a comparison or short example. Use linking words (however, for example) and correct small grammar issues (e.g., “start” → “do before” or “used to”).

範例: Not really; most people prefer cars for long distances and city travel. For example, commuters usually drive or take public transport, and cycling is mostly for recreation in parks or local neighborhoods. However, cycling was more common decades ago when there were fewer cars.

× And even if they do, they use it mostly at the parks or by the neighborhood.

✓ And even if they do, they use them mostly in parks or in the neighborhood.

The pronoun 'it' refers to 'bikes' (plural) so third person singular 'it' is incorrect; use 'them' for plural. Also 'the parks' and 'by the neighborhood' are awkward; 'in parks' and 'in the neighborhood' are natural. Change 'use it mostly at the parks or by the neighborhood' to 'use them mostly in parks or in the neighborhood' to match plurality and preposition usage.

× But it was not like back in the days where people used to start.

✓ But it was not like back in the days when people used to start.

The clause requires the relative adverb 'when' to refer to time, not 'where'. 'Where' is for place. Use 'when people used to start' to indicate a time in the past. Additionally, the verb 'start' is vague here but grammatically the main error is incorrect relative word choice.

× Not really, because when I'm on the highway or when I'm in the city, people mostly use cars and people seldom use bikes.

✓ Not really, because when I'm on the highway or in the city, people mostly use cars and seldom use bikes.

Redundant repetition of 'when' and 'people' is stylistically awkward. Combine 'when I'm on the highway or in the city' and remove the second 'people' for clarity. The tense 'I'm' is fine. This correction addresses sentence structure and adverb placement for natural English while preserving present tense.