自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently, eliminate filler words, and add one specific supporting detail. Also use linking words if adding more information.

範例: Yes. My parents gave me a bike when I was three. I rode it often as a child, and I usually went to a nearby park or the area around a family hotel. Because I practiced every day, I became confident riding on small roads.

建議: Give a clear, well-structured response: state your opinion, then support it with specific reasons and use linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and fillers; be careful with grammar (plural/singular, word order).

範例: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in Japan. For example, many elementary and high school students commute to school by bike, and people often use bikes for short trips in cities. Moreover, good cycling paths and safe streets make biking convenient and common.

× Yes, when I was three, my mother and my father gave me to, uh, gave me the bike.

✓ Yes, when I was three, my mother and father gave me a bike.

The sentence has extra words and incorrect word order ('gave me to, uh, gave me the bike'). This is a sentence structure issue. Remove the redundant phrasing and use the correct article 'a' before 'bike'. Also combine 'my mother and my father' to 'my mother and father' for natural English. Suggestion: Say 'gave me a bike' rather than 'gave me the bike' unless referring to a specific bike already known.

× So, uh, when I was child, I often load up bike and I went to, I went to, uh, a hotel place with this bike.

✓ So, when I was a child, I often rode my bike and I went to a nearby hotel with it.

Errors include missing article ('a child'), incorrect verb choice and form ('load up bike' is incorrect), and wrong verb tense/usage. The main issues are singular/plural and word choice. Use 'a child' (article before singular noun) and 'rode my bike' (correct past tense verb for riding). Replace 'a hotel place' with 'a nearby hotel' and use the pronoun 'it' to refer back to the bike. Suggestion: Use 'when I was a child' and 'rode my bike' for clear past habitual actions.

× Yes, I think that bike is very popular in Japan because a lot of umm, elementary school students and high school students go to a commute their school use by bike and along uh, when I sell the towel, I'll tell people you.

✓ Yes, I think that bikes are very popular in Japan because many elementary and high school students commute to school by bike, and when I see them, I tell people so.

Multiple problems: 'bike is' should be plural 'bikes are' to match 'a lot of students' (subject-verb agreement and number). 'go to a commute their school use by bike' is ungrammatical; correct phrase is 'commute to school by bike'. 'a lot of' can be 'many' for countable nouns. The clause 'when I sell the towel, I'll tell people you' is unclear and likely incorrect word choice; assumed intent is 'when I see them, I tell people so.' This fixes pronouns and verb forms. Suggestion: Use 'bikes are popular' and the phrase 'commute to school by bike' for clarity.