自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Correct verb tenses and vocabulary (e.g., bike vs. bag, ‘first grade’). Use linking words (for example, 'when' or 'so') to make the sequence clear. Keep the answer to no more than 3–4 sentences and avoid fillers like 'uh'.

範例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was in first grade and I used it to ride to school and to play with friends. When I was older I had a few different bikes as I grew, which I used mainly for short trips around my neighborhood.

建議: Make the statement concise and provide a clear reason and an example. Fix grammatical errors (e.g., 'that's pretty popular' -> 'they are very popular', 'sealed bikes' likely means 'shared/rental bikes'). Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to connect idea and give specific details (locations, colors, who uses them). Avoid repetition and filler words.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use shared rental bikes for short trips. For example, you can see thousands of yellow, green or blue rental bikes parked near subway stations and university campuses every day.

× I had several bags actually when I was in primary school uh, in my memory it would be a third degree or first degree where I first grade yes, at that time I go to my own bike and I used to ride it to.

✓ I had several bikes actually when I was in primary school. In my memory it would be third grade or first grade where I started. At that time I went to my own bike and I used to ride it.

Multiple past tense errors and word choice issues: 'bags' is likely a wrong word; context indicates 'bikes'. 'It would be a third degree or first degree where I first grade' is ungrammatical and should be 'third grade or first grade where I started.' 'I go to my own bike' mixes present 'go' with past context; use past tense 'went'. Use sentence breaks for clarity. Suggestion: keep verbs in past tense for past events, choose correct nouns ('bike'), and simplify sentence structure. Note: corrected sentences maintain past-tense narrative and clear phrasing.

× Yes, that's a pretty popular in my country actually Umm, if if you just have to go outside and you'll see lots of sealed bikes around almost everywhere uh, they have yellow green, blue colors almost uh, everyone.

✓ Yes, bikes are pretty popular in my country actually. If you just go outside you'll see lots of shared bikes almost everywhere; they come in yellow, green, and blue colors.

Errors: 'that's a pretty popular' is incorrect because 'that' refers to a singular noun but the student means 'bikes' (plural), so use 'bikes are pretty popular'. 'Sealed bikes' is likely a wrong word for 'shared bikes' or 'rented bikes'. 'They have yellow green, blue colors' is awkward; use 'they come in yellow, green, and blue colors.' Also remove extra filler words and duplicate 'if if'. Suggestion: match singular/plural correctly, use appropriate noun (shared bikes), list colors with commas and conjunction.