自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise, use correct tense and clearer sentence structure. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (past tense) and reduce repetition. For example, mention the bike, who made it, and why it was helpful.

範例: Yes, I did. I had a pink three-wheeled bike that my dad made for me when I was little, so it was more stable and I didn’t fall. It helped me learn to ride confidently.

建議: Provide a clear opinion sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid hesitations and repetitive phrases. Use precise vocabulary like "infrastructure" or "bike lanes" and give a brief example or consequence.

範例: Not really. In my country biking isn’t very popular because the infrastructure is poor — there are few bike lanes and sidewalks are unsuitable for cyclists. As a result, most people prefer to drive.

× Yes I do. I remembered I had a pink bike with three wheel that my dad made for me when I was a child so it was easier when I drive so I don't fall, don't fail.

✓ Yes, I did. I remember I had a pink bike with three wheels that my dad made for me when I was a child, so it was easier when I rode it and I didn't fall.

Errors: mixed present and past tenses, singular/plural noun, incorrect verb forms and repetitive negatives. Reasons and suggestions: Use consistent past tense when talking about childhood (use 'did' and 'remembered' vs 'remember' depending on intended meaning). If you mean your memory now, say 'I remember'; if reporting past belief, say 'I remembered'. Use plural 'three wheels'. Use past tense 'rode' to match 'was a child'. Use 'didn't fall' instead of 'don't fall' for past. Avoid repeating similar negatives like 'don't fall, don't fail' — choose one clear phrase. Add commas for clarity and include the object 'it' after 'rode'.

× I don't think it's quite popular in our country because we have a problem about the sidewalk that doesn't, that does not support people who ride bikes.

✓ I don't think bikes are very popular in our country because our sidewalks do not support people who ride bikes.

Errors: awkward pronoun 'it' referring to plural 'bikes', unnecessary repetition 'doesn't, that does not', and incorrect preposition 'about'. Reasons and suggestions: Replace 'it' with the plural subject 'bikes' and use 'are' for agreement. Use 'very popular' instead of 'quite popular' if intended meaning is low popularity. Say 'our sidewalks do not support' rather than 'we have a problem about the sidewalk' to be more natural. Avoid repeating the same phrase.