自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar, tense consistency and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence in the past tense, reduce fillers (e.g. "uh"), and use one or two supporting details. Combine ideas correctly using relative clauses or conjunctions: for example, say "It was a small red bike that my parents bought for me." Also avoid duplicating words ("I have" vs "I had").

範例: I had a small red bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me, and I loved riding it around the neighborhood because it was light and easy to control.

建議: Improve grammar, word choice and add linking words for clarity. Use a clear topic sentence: "Yes, I think bikes are popular." Then give 1–2 specific reasons, using linking words like "because" and "for example." Replace "biker" with "bikes" or "cycling" and use plural agreement. Provide a brief example or comparison to strengthen the answer.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many people cycle to markets or work to save money and to get exercise.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was child, uh, it was a small red bike with my parents bought for me.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bike that my parents bought for me.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past time 'when I was a child' so use simple past 'had' to match the time reference (Present tense issue, ID 6). Also 'when I was child' is missing the article 'a' ('a child') and the clause 'with my parents bought for me' is ungrammatical: use a relative clause 'that my parents bought for me' or 'which my parents bought for me'. Suggestion: keep verbs consistent with past time, include necessary articles, and use a correct relative clause.

× Well I think biker quite popular in my country because they are cheap and useful for the short trip and exercise.

✓ Well, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are cheap and useful for short trips and for exercise.

The original uses 'biker' (a person) instead of 'bikes' (the items) and lacks the plural form for 'trip' and missing article/word order. This involves singular/plural choice (ID 1) and incorrect word choice/adjective use (ID 13). Also add comma after 'Well' and 'quite' should precede 'popular'. Use 'for short trips' (plural) and include 'for' before 'exercise' for parallel structure. Suggestion: use correct noun form 'bikes', ensure plural agreement with 'they are', place 'quite' before adjective, and make parallel prepositional phrases ('for short trips and for exercise').