自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammatical accuracy, sentence structure and fluency. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two concise supporting reasons. Use correct verb tense (past), proper articles, and avoid unnecessary fillers. Add linking words (for example, because/so) to connect ideas logically. Keep answers to under five sentences and make details specific (e.g., mention typical housing types or storage costs).

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because housing in Hong Kong is very small and there wasn’t space to store one. In addition, renting storage or having a dedicated parking spot is expensive, so my family preferred not to keep bicycles at home.

建議: Clarify pronunciation and word choice, correct grammar, and organize the answer with a clear topic sentence plus specific supporting details. Replace hesitations and repetitions with smooth linking phrases (for example, "especially during weekends or holidays"). Provide one or two concrete examples of when and how people cycle (family outings, commuting, recreational parks). Keep answer concise and natural-sounding.

範例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially for recreation. For example, many families go cycling together on weekends or holidays along waterfront promenades, and some people also use bikes for short commutes in quieter neighborhoods.

× I do not have a bike when I were a child 'cause I am like the housing in Hong Kong is really small, so there is not enough split place for a bike.

✓ I did not have a bike when I was a child because housing in Hong Kong was really small, so there was not enough space to keep a bike.

The sentence mixes present tense ('do not have', 'am') with past context. Use simple past for past situations: 'did not have' and 'was'. Also 'were' is incorrect for singular subject 'I' (use 'was'). 'Split place' is incorrect collocation; use 'space' or 'place to keep/park a bike'. Replace 'cause' with 'because' for formal correctness. Suggestions: keep consistent past tense for all verbs referring to childhood and use correct collocations for 'space'.

× And if you want to have a place to place the bike, it would be quite expensive, so.

✓ And if you wanted to have a place to store the bike, it would be quite expensive.

The conditional idea fits a past-general or hypothetical: use 'wanted' or keep 'want' with present/future consistency. Using 'place to place' is repetitive and awkward; use 'place to store' or 'space to park'. Also remove trailing 'so' or complete the clause. Suggestion: choose consistent tense and avoid repeating the same noun as verb and noun.

× I think bites are quite popular in my, in my country, uh, when we have space, uh, space-time, spare time on or in the holidays, our family will always go out and cycling together.

✓ I think bikes are quite popular in my country. When we have free time or during holidays, our family always goes out cycling together.

There is a misspelling 'bites' -> 'bikes'. Remove filler repetitions 'in my, in my'. 'Space-time, spare time on or in the holidays' is confused; use 'free time' or 'during holidays'. 'Will always go out and cycling' has mixed forms; use 'always goes out cycling' for habitual actions (subject-verb agreement: 'our family always goes'). Suggestions: correct spelling, remove fillers, use clear time expressions, and maintain subject-verb agreement for habitual actions.

× So it's actually a entertainment, an entertainment act.

✓ So it's actually entertainment, an entertaining activity.

Use 'an' before words that begin with a vowel sound: 'an entertaining activity'. Using 'a entertainment' is incorrect article use. Also 'entertainment act' is unnatural here; 'entertaining activity' or simply 'entertainment' fits better. Suggestion: choose the correct article and a natural collocation such as 'entertaining activity'.