自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your response clearer and more natural by using a concise topic sentence, correcting grammar, and adding one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases (e.g. “without my without us to send my parents”).

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I loved riding it around my neighborhood, but at first I was too nervous to ride alone because my parents usually walked with me. However, once I learned to balance and pedal confidently, I felt very proud and enjoyed short rides to the park by myself.

建議: Improve coherence by starting with a clear topic sentence, then use linking words and more precise vocabulary. Reduce vague phrases like “a lot of people” and give a specific reason or brief example to support your claim.

範例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in Japan. For example, many commuters and students use them because they are cheaper than public transport and more convenient for short distances. Moreover, cycling is environmentally friendly and often faster than walking in crowded areas.

× I loved riding bike, but on the other hand I was also afraid of riding bike without my without us to send my parents.

✓ I loved riding a bike, but on the other hand I was also afraid of riding a bike without my parents taking me.

Uses of gerund 'riding' are correct but the sentence has article and phrasing errors. Add the article 'a' before 'bike' because 'bike' is a singular countable noun (Grammar Problem Type ID 1 also relates but per instructions we only correct listed types; here the primary listed type is verb + -ing). Also simplify and correct the clause 'without my without us to send my parents' to 'without my parents taking me' to make the gerund phrase clear and grammatically correct. Suggestion: use 'riding a bike' and a clear participial clause like 'without my parents taking me'.

× I loved riding bike, but on the other hand I was also afraid of riding bike without my without us to send my parents.

✓ I loved riding a bike, but on the other hand I was also afraid of riding a bike without my parents taking me.

The noun 'bike' is a singular countable noun and requires an article 'a' (singular/plural issue). The original omitted the article twice. Also the phrase 'without my without us to send my parents' is ungrammatical; replace it with 'without my parents taking me' to convey the intended meaning. Suggestion: include the appropriate article 'a' before singular countable nouns.

× I loved riding bike, but on the other hand I was also afraid of riding bike without my without us to send my parents.

✓ I loved riding a bike, but on the other hand I was also afraid of riding a bike without my parents taking me.

The original sentence has a broken and repetitive clause 'without my without us to send my parents' which makes the sentence ungrammatical. Rearranging to 'without my parents taking me' fixes the structure and clearly links the fear to being unaccompanied. Suggestion: keep clauses concise and ensure each subordinate clause has a clear subject and verb.

× bikes are really popular way of transportation in Japan because a lot of people don't really prefer paying a lot of money for public transport and bicycles are good for the environment and it's faster to move than walking.

✓ Bikes are a really popular way of transportation in Japan because a lot of people don't like paying a lot of money for public transport, bicycles are good for the environment, and they are faster than walking.

The preposition-related issues include missing article 'a' before 'really popular way' and awkward phrasing 'faster to move than walking'. Replace 'prefer paying' with 'don't like paying' for naturalness. Use the pronoun 'they' to refer back to 'bicycles' and compare correctly with 'walking' using 'faster than walking'. Suggestion: include appropriate articles and use standard comparative phrasing 'faster than walking'.

× bicycles are good for the environment and it's faster to move than walking.

✓ Bicycles are good for the environment, and they are faster than walking.

The original uses the contraction 'it's' (it is) incorrectly to refer to 'bicycles' (plural). This is a subject-pronoun agreement issue related to third person singular/plural. Replace 'it's' with 'they are' to match the plural noun 'bicycles'. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents.

× Yes, bikes are really popular way of transportation in Japan because a lot of people don't really prefer paying a lot of money for public transport and bicycles are good for the environment and it's faster to move than walking.

✓ Yes, bikes are a really popular way of transportation in Japan because a lot of people don't like paying a lot of money for public transport, bicycles are good for the environment, and they are faster than walking.

The present tense 'are' is correct, but the phrase 'prefer paying' is less natural in this context; 'don't like paying' fits present simple better to express general preference. Also adjust 'it's faster to move than walking' to 'they are faster than walking' to maintain present simple agreement and clarity. Suggestion: use natural present simple verbs for general facts and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× I loved riding bike, but on the other hand I was also afraid of riding bike without my without us to send my parents.

✓ I loved riding a bike, but on the other hand I was also afraid of riding a bike without my parents taking me.

Missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'bike' twice. Singular countable nouns normally require an article or determiner. Suggestion: insert 'a' before 'bike' when speaking about 'a bike' in general.