自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct, use correct tense and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence in the past tense (‘Yes, I had a bike’) then add one or two specific supporting details (how you used it, who you rode with, or a brief memory). Keep it to no more than 3–4 short sentences and use linking words like ‘and’ or ‘also’ to connect details.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used it every day to ride to school and to the park with my friends, and it helped me feel independent. I especially remember painting it blue and fixing the chain with my father once.

建議: Answer directly and correct grammar (use present simple) and avoid repetition. Provide a specific reason or example and use linking words such as ‘because’ or ‘for example’. Keep sentences concise and use relevant vocabulary like ‘commute’, ‘convenient’, or ‘environmentally friendly’.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them to commute short distances. For example, commuters in cities often cycle to work to avoid traffic, and cycling is seen as a cheap and environmentally friendly option.

× Yes, I do have a bike. Yes, I do have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The examiner asked about the past possession ('when you were a child'), so the student should use the past tense 'had' rather than present 'do have'. Use 'had' to match the time frame; remove the repeated phrase for clarity.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in our country since there are a lot of people that use used it for their for their everyday lives as they use it as a commuter.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in our country because many people use them in their everyday lives as a means of commuting.

Multiple problems: incorrect pronoun reference ('use used it' is redundant and inconsistent — singular 'it' should be plural 'them' to refer to 'bikes'); awkward phrasing ('for their for their') and wrong word choice ('as a commuter' should be 'for commuting' or 'as a means of commuting'). Also 'there are a lot of people that' is better as 'many people' and 'since' can be replaced with 'because' for clarity. The correction fixes pronoun agreement, removes redundancy, and improves word choice and sentence flow.