自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct, use correct grammar and concise sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “No, I didn’t.”), give one brief reason, and finish with a short personal comment. Avoid hesitation words (umm, uh) and incorrect forms (use 'didn't have' instead of 'hadn't any'). Keep answers to at most 3–4 sentences and use linking words (because, so, therefore) to connect ideas.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my parents thought it was unsafe. However, now I am an adult and I would like to buy a bicycle so I can ride for fun and exercise.

建議: Answer clearly and expand with two specific points using linking words. Use correct agreement (bikes are popular) and avoid repetition and hesitations. Give concrete reasons and an example: mention urban traffic, safety issues, or bike lanes. Keep to 2–4 concise sentences and use linking words like 'however', 'because', or 'for example'.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular, especially in smaller towns and among students. However, in big cities their use is declining because heavy traffic and limited bike lanes make cycling unsafe, for example on busy roads during rush hour.

× No, I hadn't any cycle, umm, because my parents didn't think of it to buy me a cycle.

✓ No, I didn't have a bicycle because my parents didn't think to buy me one.

The original uses 'hadn't any cycle' which is unnatural in modern English; use 'didn't have any' or 'didn't have a bicycle'. 'It' is incorrectly referring to the action; replace 'think of it to buy me a cycle' with 'think to buy me one' or 'think of buying me one'. Also 'cycle' is less common than 'bicycle' or 'bike'. Use the simple past 'didn't have' to match the question about the past.

× Uh, now I am a grown up woman, I feel like that I should have a bicycle so that I can ride the bicycle.

✓ Now I am a grown-up woman, and I feel that I should get a bicycle so that I can ride it.

Use 'grown-up' with a hyphen and add 'and' to connect clauses. 'Feel like that' is incorrect; use 'feel that' or 'feel like' + verb. 'Should have a bicycle' is understandable but 'should get a bicycle' is more natural for present desire. Avoid repeating 'the bicycle'; use 'it'. Present tense 'am' is correct.

× It looks very fun.

✓ It sounds like a lot of fun.

'Looks very fun' is not wrong but sounds awkward for an activity; native speakers say 'sounds like fun' or 'looks like fun' or 'a lot of fun'. 'A lot of fun' is more natural here.

× Yes, it is, uh, it is very popular in my country.

✓ Yes, they are very popular in my country.

The question asks about 'bikes' (plural), so the pronoun should be plural 'they' and the verb 'are' to agree with plural subject. Using 'it is' incorrectly treats 'bikes' as singular.

× Uh, at the same time it is getting, uh, getting less, less in our Rd. because it's too much traffic jam, uh, with the cars not safe for bicycle and uh, some young young.

✓ At the same time, they are becoming less common on our roads because there is too much traffic and cars are not safe for bicycles, and some young people ...

Multiple issues: 'it is getting less' is vague; use 'they are becoming less common' to refer to bikes (plural). 'Rd.' should be 'roads'. 'It's too much traffic jam' is incorrect; use 'there is too much traffic' or 'too much traffic jam' is ungrammatical. 'With the cars not safe for bicycle' should be 'cars are not safe for bicycles' or 'cars make it unsafe for bicycles'. 'some young young' is incomplete; likely 'some young people'. Use plural agreement and correct pronouns accordingly.