自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문법과 시제 사용이 일관되지 않고 표현이 중복되어 자연스럽지 않습니다. 우선 과거 경험을 말할 때는 과거 시제를 사용하고, 불필요한 반복을 제거하세요. 또한 'leader'라는 단어는 문맥상 어색하므로 정확한 의미(예: child, kid)를 사용하세요. 문장을 더 명확하게 만들기 위해 주제문(topic sentence)으로 시작한 뒤, 이유나 상황을 연결어(because, so, when)를 적절히 사용해 한두 개의 구체적 세부사항을 덧붙이세요. 예: "I had a bike when I was a child because I enjoyed exercising and riding with my younger sister."

範例: I had a bike when I was a child because I loved exercising and often rode it with my younger sister. For example, we would cycle to the park every weekend and sometimes race each other on the quiet streets.

建議: 문법(주어-동사 일치)과 표현의 중복을 피해야 합니다. 'bikes is' 같은 오류를 고치고, 연결어를 이용해 이유를 더 구체적으로 설명하세요. 가능한 한 관련 어휘(commute, recreational, bike lanes, cyclists)를 사용해 내용을 풍부하게 하세요. 예를 들어 도시의 출퇴근, 공원에서의 여가 활동, 자전거 인프라에 대한 구체적 관찰을 덧붙이면 좋습니다.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. I often see people cycling to work or school, and many families ride bicycles in parks on weekends. In addition, the growing number of bike lanes in cities has made cycling a convenient and safe option for short trips.

× Yeah, I have a bike.

✓ Yeah, I had a bike.

The question asks about the past ('Did you have a bike when you were a child?'), so the student should use past tense. Use 'had' for past simple of 'have' to match the time frame. Suggestion: Match the verb tense to the time reference in the question; use 'had' for past possession.

× When I was a leader, because I was, I loved exercising and play with my my little sister.

✓ When I was a child, I loved exercising and playing with my little sister.

The original sentence is confusing and contains redundancy and incorrect verb forms. 'When I was a leader' seems incorrect contextually; likely intended 'when I was a child'. After 'loved' the verb should be in -ing form ('playing'), and duplicate 'my' should be removed. Suggestion: Use a clear time clause ('When I was a child'), avoid redundant phrases, and use the gerund after 'loved'.

× So I have a bike.

✓ So I had a bike.

Again, the question is about past possession. 'Have' should be changed to past simple 'had' to be consistent with the past time frame. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent within the response; use 'had' for past possession.

× I had a bike.

✓ I had a bike.

This sentence is correct as is. It correctly uses past simple to state possession in the past. Suggestion: None needed; sentence correctly matches the past timeframe.

× Yes, I think bikes is Bikes are popular in my country because I can see many people who ride the bike on the street in parks.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because I can see many people riding bikes on the streets and in parks.

There are several issues: 'bikes is' has subject-verb agreement error—use 'bikes are'. The phrase 'ride the bike' is awkward and should be plural/gerund to match general statement: 'riding bikes'. Also 'on the street in parks' needs prepositions and plurality: 'on the streets and in parks'. Use gerund 'riding' after verbs describing observation. Suggestion: Ensure subject and verb agree ('bikes are'), use gerunds for ongoing actions of many people ('riding'), and use appropriate plural nouns and prepositions ('streets' and 'in parks').