自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise, correct grammar, and give one clear supporting detail. Use past tense consistently and avoid extra filler words. Include a linking word to connect the topic sentence and detail (e.g., "and" or "so").

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I used it to ride to school and to the park most weekends.

建議: Speak more clearly and use correct sentence structure. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give specific reasons or examples using linking words such as "because" or "for example." Avoid fillers ("well," "uh") and complete your sentences.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many children use them to travel to school and to visit parks; for example, when I was a child I rode my bike to school every day.

× I use that bike to go to the school or and park.

✓ I used that bike to go to school and the park.

The original sentence has number and article problems. 'Use' should be past tense to match 'did have' and 'when I was a child' (tense consistency), and 'the school' is unnecessary when speaking generally; use 'to school'. Also 'or and' is incorrect conjunction use; replace with 'and'. Use 'the park' or just 'park' — 'the park' is more natural here.

× Well, I think it's the bikes are very popular in the country, especially with the kids, uh, like they're using for the park, they're using for the schools.

✓ Well, I think bikes are very popular in the country, especially with kids; they use them for the park and for school.

The phrase 'it's the bikes are' mixes constructions and is ungrammatical; remove 'it's' and use simple present 'bikes are'. 'The kids' can be general 'kids'. 'They're using for the park' is incorrect structure; use 'they use them for the park' and 'for school' (no plural 'schools' needed when speaking generally). Also replace the repetitive 'they're using' with 'they use' for clarity.

× Even me, I used for my school and for.

✓ Even I used one for school too.

The original sentence lacks an object after 'used' and misorders pronouns ('Even me' should be 'Even I'). Use 'used one' to indicate the bicycle and 'for school' without 'my' for general past habit. Also finish the sentence; remove the trailing 'and for'.