自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct number agreement ("it" or "one" for bike) and avoid repetition. For example, say how often you borrowed it and a brief memory to make the answer more vivid.

範例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. However, I often borrowed my neighbour's bike on weekends, and I remember riding to the park every Saturday to practise balancing and racing with friends.

建議: Answer directly then give clear, specific reasons with linking words. Remove filler sounds (uh) and correct grammar ("bikes are popular", "stores that sell bikes", "especially during summer vacation"). Provide one or two concrete examples or comparisons to support your point.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially among children and teenagers. For example, many shops offer seasonal promotions on bikes during summer, and families often buy bikes so kids can ride around neighbourhood parks during their school holidays.

× No, unfortunately I didn't have one but I used to borrow from my friend and play with them.

✓ No, unfortunately I didn't have one, but I used to borrow one from my friend and play with it.

The sentence has two issues relevant to the provided list: (1) Incorrect pronoun number/use (should be 'it' for a singular bike) — this maps to 'Incorrect use of pronouns' but because the instruction 2 says only correct mistakes that meet the list, we correct pronoun to match singular. (2) The phrase 'borrow from my friend' lacks the object 'one' which clarifies what was borrowed; adding 'one' makes the sentence grammatically complete. Also 'used to borrow' is correct for past habitual actions so tense is fine. Suggestion: use 'one' as the object when referring to a singular noun and match pronoun number ('it') for the subsequent reference.

× Yes, of course, playing with the bike is, uh, is so popular in my country, especially for kids.

✓ Yes, of course, riding bikes is very popular in my country, especially among children.

The original uses awkward noun phrase and article ('the bike') and filler repetition 'is, uh, is'. Correct usage: 'riding bikes' (general activity) and plural 'bikes' for a general statement. Also use 'among children' rather than 'for kids' for natural collocation. This corrects present tense/general statement construction and improves noun/article use.

× Uh, we can find uh, some stores that sell bike specially in the, in the summer, uh, where kids took their, uh, their vacations so they can play.

✓ We can find some stores that sell bikes, especially in the summer when children take their vacations so they can play.

Multiple issues: use plural 'bikes' for general plural reference; 'specially' is incorrect adverb here—use 'especially'; 'in the summer' is fine but 'when children take their vacations' uses correct tense for habitual/predictable events (present simple), not past 'took'. Also replace 'kids' with 'children' for formality/clarity. This corrects preposition/adverb choice and verb tense for habitual events.