自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is short and direct, which is good, but it could be improved by starting with a clear topic sentence and adding one or two specific supporting details. Avoid contractions like "it's" when referring to past possession — use past tense ("it was"). Add a linking phrase to make the response smoother (e.g., "Yes, I did. ") and include a brief reason or a memory to enrich the answer.

範例: Yes, I did. I had a blue bike that I got when I was five, and I remember riding it to the park every weekend. It was slightly too big for me at first, but I quickly learned to balance and became quite confident on it.

建議: Your answer addresses the question and provides reasons, but there are several issues: hesitations ("uh"), a likely word mistake ("bugs" instead of "bikes"), inconsistent reference ("you" vs "people"), and some redundancy. Improve fluency by removing fillers, correct vocabulary, use linking words (e.g., "Firstly,", "Also,"), and be specific about what you mean by "shared bikes" and the cost. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Firstly, there are many dockless shared bikes available, which makes short trips very convenient. Also, they are affordable — some services cost about CN¥20 per month for frequent users — so you can see them on almost every street.

× Yeah, it's blue. I got it when I was 5.

✓ Yeah, it was blue. I got it when I was five.

The student is describing a possession in the past ('Did you have a bike when you were a child?'), so tense consistency requires past simple ('was') rather than present ('it's'). Also, use of numerals in spoken responses is acceptable but writing out 'five' is stylistically better. Suggestion: keep past tense throughout when talking about past possessions and events.

× Yeah, there are many, uh, shared bugs now, and it's very, uh, convenient for you to travel by them.

✓ Yeah, there are many shared bikes now, and it's very convenient to travel by them.

The word 'bugs' is likely a mispronunciation or typo for 'bikes'; correcting to 'bikes' fixes vocabulary rather than grammar. 'It's very convenient for you to travel by them' is awkward: 'to travel by them' is acceptable but redundant to include 'for you'. Better: 'it's very convenient to travel by them.' Remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary 'for you' to make the sentence natural.

× You can see them everywhere and it's really cheap.

✓ You can see them everywhere, and they're really cheap.

The student uses 'it's' (it is) to refer back to plural 'bikes', which is a pronoun-number mismatch. Replace with 'they're' to agree with plural noun 'bikes'. Also keep present tense 'can see' consistent with general statements.

× It costs just CN¥20 a month.

✓ They cost just CN¥20 a month.

Again, 'it' refers to 'bikes' (plural), so subject-pronoun and verb must be plural ('they cost'). Use plural verb form to match the plural subject. Keep present simple for general cost statements.