自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar and pronunciation errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid irrelevant or unclear phrases (e.g., “a few bombs but it” is unclear). Use linking words like “however” or “so” to connect ideas, and keep to under five sentences.

範例: I didn’t have my own bicycle as a child, but my cousin lent me his often. As a result, I learned to ride in our neighborhood and became confident cycling short distances to visit friends.

建議: Good content and clear main idea. Improve by using more precise vocabulary and linking words, and give a concrete example or brief comparison. Make sentences smoother and correct minor tense/wording issues (e.g., say “during the COVID-19 pandemic” and “commute between home and work”).

範例: Yes, bicycles became more popular in my country during the COVID-19 pandemic. Many people started commuting by bike to avoid crowded public transport, and as a result they noticed improvements in fitness and saved money on travel.

× I never had my own bicycle when I was a child, but my cousin had one and he allowed me to use that bicycle to roam around our neighborhood and I was able to train on that bicycle at a few bombs but it.

✓ I never had my own bicycle when I was a child, but my cousin had one and he allowed me to use it to roam around our neighborhood, and I was able to practice riding that bicycle a few times.

Errors: 'that bicycle' repeated and unnatural phrase 'train on that bicycle at a few bombs but it.' The problem involves sentence structure and incorrect word choice rather than pluralization; however the closest listed type is 'Singular and plural issue' because 'that bicycle' repetition and 'a few bombs' is incorrect word form. Correction replaces repetitions with pronoun 'it' and changes 'train on' to 'practice riding' and 'a few bombs' to 'a few times' to convey the intended meaning. Suggestion: use pronouns to avoid repetition, choose correct collocations (practice riding, a few times), and proofread for stray words.

× I think bicycles are popular in our country, especially during the COVID pandemic days.

✓ I think bicycles became more popular in our country, especially during the COVID pandemic.

Error: tense and word choice. The student used present simple 'are popular' while referring to a specific past period 'during the COVID pandemic days.' The correct tense is past simple or present perfect depending on context; here 'became more popular' fits. Also 'pandemic days' is unnatural; use 'during the COVID pandemic'. Suggestion: match tense to time expressions and use natural collocations ('during the COVID pandemic').

× People use it as a mode of transportation going back and forth from home to work.

✓ People used it as a mode of transportation to travel back and forth between home and work.

Error: preposition and tense choice. 'Going back and forth from home to work' is awkward; the correct prepositions are 'between home and work'. Also align tense with previous sentence ('used'). Suggestion: use 'between' for two locations and 'travel back and forth' for clarity.

× Also, it made them realize how to take care of health.

✓ It also made people realize how to take care of their health.

Errors: pronoun reference and missing possessive. 'It made them realize' is vague; better to say 'it made people realize'. 'Take care of health' needs a possessive 'their health'. Suggestion: use clear subjects ('people') and possessive pronouns ('their health') for natural English.