自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Use correct tense and a clear topic sentence. Start with a simple past tense statement ("Yes, I did") since you are talking about the past, then add one or two specific details (where you rode it, who gave it to you, or how often you rode) using a linking word if needed. Keep it to no more than 3–4 short sentences.

範例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bike that my parents bought for me when I was seven. I often rode it around the neighborhood with my friends after school, and it helped me feel independent.

建議: Give a clear direct opinion first, then support it with specific reasons using linking words. Avoid filler words and repetition. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., "open spaces," "bike lanes," "flat terrain"). Limit to 2–3 sentences and connect ideas with words like "because," "for example," or "also."

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many towns have wide open spaces and dedicated bike lanes. For example, in my town there are flat roads and parks where people cycle for commuting and leisure.

× Yes, I do have a bike when I was a kid.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a kid.

The sentence mixes present tense 'do have' with past time reference 'when I was a kid.' Use past simple 'had' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: Use consistent tense—since the time is in the past, use 'had.'

× Well, yes, bikes are popular in our in my country because it has a lot, especially when especially in our town, it has a lot of open spaces and also uh Rd. that can easily or bike can uh ride easily.

✓ Well, yes, bikes are popular in my country because we have many open spaces and roads in our town where people can easily ride bikes.

This sentence has multiple problems: redundant phrases ('our in my country'), wrong pronoun/reference ('it has a lot' — unclear subject), and disfluent structure. Also word choice 'Rd.' is abbreviated and 'bike can ride' is incorrect. The corrected version uses clear subject 'we' and plural nouns 'open spaces and roads,' and the relative clause 'where people can easily ride bikes.' Suggestion: Remove redundancies, use plural nouns to match 'many,' and structure the sentence with a clear subject and verb. Replace informal fillers and abbreviations with full words.