自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, fix verb form and tense errors (have → had, was → were), remove filler words (Umm, so), and complete the reason. Use one or two linking words to connect ideas and keep the answer within 3–4 sentences. For example, state you had a bike, say when you learned to ride it, give a brief reason and one supporting detail (e.g., parents' concern about safety).

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I learned to ride it at the age of six because my parents were cautious about my safety. As a result, they waited until I was more confident and steady on my feet before teaching me.

建議: Correct vocabulary and pronunciation errors (pie → bikes), use a clear comparison structure and provide a brief explanation with a linking word. Start with a direct answer, then compare past and present popularity and give one reason (e.g., convenience, urbanization). Keep it concise and specific.

範例: They used to be very popular when I was a child, but now motorbikes are more common. This change is mainly due to increased urbanization and the need for faster, longer-distance travel in cities.

× Oh yes, I think everyone have a bike when they was when they were children.

✓ Oh yes, I think everyone had a bike when they were children.

Two subject-verb agreement errors: 'everyone' is singular and requires 'had' (past tense singular), not 'have' (ID 27 and 5). Also 'they was when they were' is redundant and uses 'was' with plural 'they'; use 'were' (ID 6 and 27). Suggestion: Use singular verb with 'everyone' and use 'were' for 'they' in past tense. Combine to 'everyone had a bike when they were children.'

× Umm but I only learned to ride it when I was 6.

✓ Umm, but I only learned to ride it when I was six.

Number should be written as a word in formal speech transcripts and tense is correct but numeral form is inconsistent (ID 5). Suggestion: Spell out small numbers in writing and keep past tense 'learned' as used.

× I guess I started late because my parents were so 'cause.

✓ I guess I started late because of my parents.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and contains a fragment 'were so 'cause' which is unclear. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Suggestion: Replace with a clear causal phrase such as 'because of my parents' or 'because my parents were strict' depending on intended meaning.

× When I was a kid, yeah pie is so popular, but now motorbike is more common.

✓ When I was a kid, yeah, bicycles were so popular, but now motorbikes are more common.

Multiple number and word-choice errors: 'pie' is likely a miswording for 'bikes' or 'bicycles'; 'is' should be past tense 'were' to match 'When I was a kid' (ID 1 and 5). Also 'motorbike' should be plural 'motorbikes' to match comparison (ID 1). Suggestion: Use the correct noun 'bicycles' and keep tense agreement by using 'were' for the past and plural forms for general statements about common items.