自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clear and direct: start with a simple topic sentence stating whether you had a bike, then give one or two coherent supporting details (when you got it and whether you learned to ride). Use correct tense and avoid repetition. Link ideas with a short connector like “but” or “so.” Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me when I was eight, but I didn’t learn to ride it properly until later because I was nervous. Eventually I practiced with a friend and became confident riding to school.

建議: Answer directly and provide specific supporting details. Start with a clear opinion sentence, then add 1–2 concrete reasons or examples (who rides bikes, where, and why). Use linking words like “especially” or “for example.” Avoid fillers and repeated words. Maintain correct grammar and plural/singular agreement.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially among young people. For example, many cities have cycling clubs and bike-sharing schemes, and people often ride for exercise or commuting because it is cheap and good for health.

× I have got a bike when I work a child because I already I never try to ride a bike and a bike.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child, but I never tried to ride it.

Grammar problem type IDs: 5 (Past tense issue), 6 (Present tense issue), 26 (Sentence structure errors), 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns). The original sentence mixes present perfect 'have got' with past context and uses incorrect verbs and pronouns ('work a child', 'I already I never try', 'a bike and a bike'), causing confusion. Use simple past 'had' and 'was' for past facts: 'I had a bike when I was a child.' Use past simple 'tried' for completed past actions: 'I never tried to ride it.' Replace the repeated noun with the pronoun 'it' to avoid redundancy. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for all actions referring to childhood and use correct pronouns and concise sentence structure.

× I think by a very popular in my country, especially among young people, umm, in my country, uh, there are many biker group, umm, in every city, uh, the biker, the biker had to free up.

✓ I think bikes are very popular in my country, especially among young people. There are many biker groups in every city, and bikers have a lot of free time.

Grammar problem type IDs: 11 (Incorrect use of prepositions) and 1 (Singular and plural issue) and 6 (Present tense issue) and 26 (Sentence structure errors) and 22 (Article errors). Errors include 'by a very popular' (incorrect preposition and article), 'biker group' singular where plural 'biker groups' is needed, awkward repetition and unclear clause 'the biker had to free up.' Use plural noun 'bikes' and correct verb 'are' for present state: 'bikes are very popular.' Use 'There are many biker groups' for plural existence. Replace unclear phrase with 'bikers have a lot of free time' to convey intended meaning; use present simple 'have' for habitual/current facts. Suggestions: choose correct prepositions/articles ('are very popular'), ensure noun number agrees with context (group -> groups), and write clear clauses rather than repeating words or filler sounds.