自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar, use a clear topic sentence, fix singular/plural errors, avoid filler words, and add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Keep to a maximum of 4–5 sentences.

範例: I didn't have a bike when I was a child; I had a pair of roller skates instead. Because all my cousins skated in the backyard, I begged my parents for the same toy and they eventually bought me a bright red pair. I practiced jumps and simple tricks for hours, which made those afternoons really fun and memorable.

建議: Correct repetition and grammar, use a clear topic sentence and link reasons with cohesive devices. Provide specific examples or comparisons and avoid vague phrases. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, bicycles and motorbikes are very popular in my country. For example, many college students ride motorbikes to classes because they are faster and cheaper than cars. Moreover, bikes help avoid heavy traffic, so people often choose them for short city trips.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, instead I had a roller skaters that I loved because all my cousins had one and I used to watch them play in the backyard.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child; instead, I had roller skates that I loved because all my cousins had them and I used to watch them play in the backyard.

The phrase 'a roller skaters' mixes singular article 'a' with plural noun 'skaters' (singular/plural issue). Also 'all my cousins had one' should match plural 'cousins' with 'them'. Suggest using 'roller skates' (plural) without 'a', and change 'one' to 'them' to agree in number. Use a semicolon or period to separate independent clauses and add a comma after 'instead' for clarity.

× So I begged my parents for the same toy and spent hours practicing tricks with them.

✓ So I begged my parents for the same toy and spent hours practicing tricks with it.

The noun 'toy' is singular, so subsequent pronoun should be singular ('it') rather than plural ('them') — this is a present/past reference consistency and pronoun number agreement, categorized under present tense/usage. Replace 'them' with 'it' to refer correctly to 'the same toy.'

× It was really fun experience umm and it was really memorable for me because I'm happy and grateful that my parents bought me one.

✓ It was a really fun experience, and it was very memorable for me because I was happy and grateful that my parents bought me one.

Missing article before 'fun experience' ('a'), filler 'umm' should be omitted in written form, and tense inconsistency: describing a past event should use past tense 'I was happy and grateful' rather than present 'I'm.' Also replace repeated 'really' with 'very' for style and add a comma before 'and.'

× Yes, a lot of youngsters use bikers use bikes around the city, especially college students because they find it convenient and more easier to drive from one place to another instead of waiting for traffic for hours.

✓ Yes, a lot of youngsters use bikes around the city, especially college students, because they find them convenient and easier to ride from one place to another instead of waiting in traffic for hours.

Original has redundancy 'use bikers use bikes' and incorrect word 'bikers' where 'bikes' is intended. 'More easier' is incorrect (double comparative); use 'easier.' 'Drive' is used for cars; for bikes use 'ride.' 'Them' refers back to 'bikes' (pronoun agreement). Also use 'waiting in traffic' rather than 'waiting for traffic.' These are issues of incorrect word choice, pronoun agreement, and comparative form.