自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct verb forms and word choices (e.g., 'a bike', 'was gifted to me', or better 'my father gave me'). Avoid repeating unnecessary phrases.

範例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. It was my favorite color and my father gave it to me for my birthday, so I remember riding it every weekend.

建議: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and use specific reasons with correct vocabulary. Avoid incorrect words ('hodophile') and confusing contrasts. Use linking words (for example, 'because', 'however') and correct subject-verb agreement. Provide one or two concrete examples or trends.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and exercise. For example, in cities you can see many commuters cycling to work, while in rural areas people ride bikes for leisure and errands.

× Yes, when I was a child I had one bike of my favorite color which is gifted to me by my father on my birthday.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I had a bike of my favorite color which was gifted to me by my father on my birthday.

The sentence mixes past simple ('had') with a present-participial-like structure 'is gifted' that is incorrect for a past event. The passive gift should be in the past tense 'was gifted' to match the time frame. Also 'one bike' is unnatural; use 'a bike.' Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent; change 'is gifted' to 'was gifted' and 'one bike' to 'a bike'.

× Yes, in my nation bikes are popular because everyone like to go outside or to do travel.

✓ Yes, in my country bikes are popular because everyone likes to go outside or to travel.

Subject-verb agreement and verb form errors: 'everyone' is singular so the verb should be 'likes' (third person singular). 'To do travel' is not idiomatic; use the infinitive 'to travel' or 'to go travelling.' Also 'nation' is correct but 'country' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'likes' with 'everyone' and 'to travel' instead of 'to do travel'.

× Mainly every single person have the hobbies like they are hodophile so that's why.

✓ Mainly every single person has hobbies and many are hodophiles, so that's why.

'Every single person' is singular and requires 'has' not 'have' (subject-verb agreement). The phrase 'have the hobbies like they are hodophile' is ungrammatical and awkward. 'Hodophile' (one who loves to travel) should be used as a noun or adjective: 'many are hodophiles' or 'many love to travel.' Suggestion: use 'has hobbies' for singular subjects and rephrase awkward idiom to 'many are hodophiles' or 'many enjoy travelling'.

× But some people prefer to use bicycles more than bikes.

✓ But some people prefer bicycles to motorcycles.

This sentence shows incorrect or unclear word choice: 'bicycles' and 'bikes' are usually the same thing, so 'prefer to use bicycles more than bikes' is redundant and confusing. Likely the speaker meant 'bicycles rather than motorcycles' or 'bicycles rather than cars.' Suggestion: clarify the comparison using 'prefer X to Y' structure (e.g., 'prefer bicycles to motorcycles') and use consistent vocabulary.