自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Clarify and correct grammar, remove fillers, and use a clear sequence with linking words. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give 2–3 concise, specific supporting details (e.g., ages, who taught you, how you learned). Use past tense consistently and avoid repetition. Aim for 2–3 sentences, with linking words such as “first,” “then,” and “after that.”

範例: Yes, I had a few bikes as a child. First, my parents bought me a tricycle when I was about three, and after I learned to balance I started using a two‑wheeled bicycle at around seven; my father helped me practice until I could ride confidently.

建議: Be more concise and use accurate grammar and varied vocabulary. Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then support it with specific reasons and examples (e.g., cultural habits, age groups, statistics or visible scenes). Use linking words such as “because,” “for example,” or “moreover.” Avoid colloquial fillers like “like” and “gonna.”

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short journeys and exercise. For example, children learn to cycle at school and you often see both young people and the elderly riding bicycles in parks and neighborhoods.

× 'Yes, I used to have one or two bike when I was a child and I remember my parents, uh, used to bite me a tricycle.'

✓ 'Yes, I used to have one or two bikes when I was a child and I remember my parents, uh, used to buy me a tricycle.'

'one or two bike' is incorrect because the quantifier 'one or two' requires a plural noun form 'bikes'. Also 'bite' is a wrong verb here; context indicates 'buy'. Suggestion: use 'one or two bikes' and 'buy me a tricycle'.

× 'And then after I practice and managed to ride the tricycle, my parents switched to a bicycle and after that I was managed to ride a bike at around.'

✓ 'Then after I practised and managed to ride the tricycle, my parents switched to a bicycle and after that I managed to ride a bike.'

'I practice' is present tense but the narrative is past, so use past 'practised'. 'I was managed to ride' is ungrammatical; the correct simple past is 'I managed to ride'. Also the phrase 'at around' is incomplete and unnecessary; remove it or specify an age/time. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently and use 'managed to'.

× 'In my opinion, I think bike is pretty common in my country as I remember, like I think at one stage in life everybody's gonna ride a bike at some point.'

✓ 'In my opinion, I think bikes are pretty common in my country; I remember that at one stage in life everybody is going to ride a bike at some point.'

'bike is pretty common' needs plural 'bikes' or a definite/indefinite article ('a bike') to be grammatical; because speaking about bikes in general, use plural 'bikes are'. Also replace informal 'gonna' with 'is going to' for standard grammar. Suggestion: use plural for general statements and avoid colloquial contractions in formal answers.

× 'And for me it is really common to see all the kids or the elderly ride a bike in my neighborhood.'

✓ 'For me, it is really common to see all the kids and the elderly riding bikes in my neighborhood.'

'kids or the elderly' is awkward; use 'kids and the elderly' to include both groups. 'ride a bike' should be pluralized to 'riding bikes' to match plural subjects and to use the -ing form after 'see'. Suggestion: use 'see + object + -ing' (see them riding) and match plural nouns.