自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct small grammatical mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "ride the bike" multiple times) and correct word choice (use "seat" or "saddle" instead of "chair"). Also fix tense/agreement errors and finish the final clause. Keep the answer within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I did. My father taught me to ride and we rode together every Sunday. At first he put on training wheels, and after I grew more confident he removed them and steadied the saddle while I pedaled away.

建議: Make your opinion clearer and correct grammar (subject–verb agreement and word choice). Give a specific reason or example and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid vague phrases like "anywhere else"—give common destinations. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular. Many people cannot afford cars, so they rely on bikes for commuting to work, going to school, and running errands in the city.

× I had a bike when I was younger.

✓ I had a bike when I was younger.

No grammatical error; sentence correctly uses past simple to describe a past state. Keep as is.

× My dad actually taught me how to ride the bike and we would ride it every Sunday.

✓ My dad actually taught me how to ride the bike, and we rode it every Sunday.

Mixed use of past simple (taught) and modal 'would' to describe habitual past actions can be acceptable, but using consistent past simple ('rode') is clearer. Suggestion: use past simple for repeated past events when already using past simple elsewhere.

× He would teach us how to properly ride the bike, first with training wheels and then right after without.

✓ He taught us how to ride the bike properly, first with training wheels and then immediately without them.

Original mixes conditional habitual 'would' with context that is clearly past; also word order 'how to properly ride' splits infinitive awkwardly. Correct by using past simple 'taught' and place adverb 'properly' after the verb; clarify 'without them' to refer to training wheels.

× After he removed the training wheels, he would guide us by holding the the chair of the bike and then would.

✓ After he removed the training wheels, he guided us by holding the bike's seat, and then he let go.

Original has repetition 'the the', unnatural phrase 'chair of the bike', and an incomplete clause 'and then would.' Use clear nouns ('seat') and complete the action ('let go'). Use past simple 'guided' to match past narrative.

× I would say that bikes are popular in our country because most of the people here doesn't have the money to buy cars, so they would use bikes for transportation, going to work or anywhere else.

✓ I would say that bikes are popular in our country because most people here don't have the money to buy cars, so they use bikes for transportation, to go to work, or to go elsewhere.

Errors: 'most of the people' is wordy—use 'most people'; 'doesn't' is incorrect with plural subject—use 'don't'; inconsistent modal 'would' is unnecessary for general statements—use present simple 'use'; parallelism and phrasing improved ('to go to work', 'to go elsewhere').