自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, and add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Also correct small grammatical errors (e.g., tense and subject-verb agreement) and keep the answer within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes. I had a bright blue bike when I was a child and I often rode it around my neighborhood with my friends. Because the area was quiet and safe, we would cycle there both in the morning and in the evening, which made those memories very special.

建議: Improve accuracy, clarity and vocabulary: begin with a clear opinion, avoid incorrect or unclear words (e.g., 'hell' is wrong), and provide specific reasons with linking words. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'cycling is popular', 'it benefits our health') and give one concrete example or trend to support your point.

範例: Yes, cycling has become increasingly popular in my country. For example, more people use bikes for short commutes because it is affordable and healthy; as a result, cities are building more bike lanes to encourage this trend.

× I really remember my childhood, when I was a child, I had a blue bike.

✓ I clearly remember my childhood when I had a blue bike.

Redundant phrases and awkward comma placement create a sentence structure problem. 'My childhood' and 'when I was a child' repeat the same idea. Remove redundancy and join clauses with correct punctuation. Suggestion: avoid repeating the same meaning and use one temporal clause (when I had a blue bike).

× I used to ride it around my neighborhood with my friends.

✓ I used to ride it around my neighborhood with my friends.

This sentence is grammatically correct for a habitual past action; no change needed. Keep 'used to' for repeated past activities.

× Uh, it doesn't, it wasn't matter for us to ride my bike, uh, whether it is early in the morning or evening.

✓ It didn't matter to us whether it was early in the morning or in the evening; we would ride my bike.

The original mixes present and past tenses and has incorrect verb forms and word order. Use past tense 'didn't matter' for past situation, 'whether it was' for time clause, and include 'in the evening' for parallel structure. Reorder to form a clear main clause and subordinate clause.

× Uh, riding bikes are getting popular not only in my country but also around the world because it is hell.

✓ Riding bikes is becoming popular not only in my country but also around the world because it is healthy.

The gerund phrase 'riding bikes' is singular, so use singular verb 'is.' 'Getting popular' is better expressed as 'becoming popular.' The word 'hell' is incorrect in context; likely intended 'healthy' or 'helpful.' Replace with 'healthy.'

× It is beneficial for our health.

✓ It is beneficial for our health.

Sentence is correct; no change needed. 'It' appropriately refers to riding bikes and 'our health' is a suitable object.

× As much as you ride a bike, a huge amount of the oxygen, uh, reflects on your body.

✓ The more you ride a bike, the more oxygen circulates in your body.

Original sentence uses incorrect comparative structure and the verb 'reflects' is wrong in this context. Use comparative correlative structure 'The more... the more...' and use 'circulates in your body' or 'increases oxygen flow' to express physiological effect. Avoid vague phrases like 'a huge amount of the oxygen'.