自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid awkward phrases like "that time."

範例: No, I didn't own a bike as a child. However, I often rented one on weekends to ride around my neighborhood, which helped me learn balance and made outings with friends more fun.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, use linking words, and provide specific reasons or examples. Use formal contractions and avoid casual slang like "'cause." Keep it within 3–4 sentences for clarity.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Firstly, they are a quick way to get around busy streets, and secondly, they can access narrow lanes where cars cannot go. For example, many students and delivery workers prefer bikes because they save time and money.

× I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but I used to rent a bike that time.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but I used to rent a bike at that time.

The phrase 'that time' is unnatural in this context; when referring to a period in the past, use 'at that time' or simply 'then'. Also 'used to rent' is acceptable for habitual past actions; changing 'that time' to 'at that time' makes the sentence natural and grammatically correct.

× Yes, of course bikes are popular among the young generations and across other people too 'cause the main reason is bike saves time and there are so many places where bike can move where other vehicles can't.

✓ Yes, of course bikes are popular among younger generations and other people too, because the main reason is that bikes save time and there are many places where bikes can go where other vehicles can't.

Several issues: 'the young generations' is incorrect; use 'younger generations' or 'young people'. 'Across other people' is unnatural; use 'other people'. Informal ' 'cause' should be 'because'. 'Bike saves time' needs article agreement and subject-verb agreement; use 'bikes save time' (plural subject with plural verb) or 'a bike saves time'. 'There are so many places where bike can move' is awkward; use 'many places where bikes can go'. The correction fixes quantifier and noun usage and ensures subject-verb agreement and natural phrasing.