自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct past tense and simpler sentence structure. Begin with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), then add one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Avoid contradictions (saying you did not have a bike then saying he bought you one) by clarifying timing. Also reduce redundancy and stay within 3–4 sentences.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike at first because my father was worried I might fall. However, when I was about eight he bought me a small bicycle, and I rode it every afternoon around my neighborhood. I remember practicing on the quiet streets near our house until I felt confident.

建議: Improve natural phrasing and vocabulary, use linking words, and include a specific example or statistic. Start with a concise topic sentence, then explain reasons using words like 'because' or 'due to', and finish with a brief example. Avoid awkward phrasing such as 'a lot popular' and 'high budget cars'.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheaper and easier to use in heavy traffic. For example, many commuters choose motorcycles or scooters to travel to work faster, and students often use bikes to get to school. As a result, two-wheelers are a common sight in both cities and small towns.

× No, I did not had a bike when I was a child because my father was afraid that I would fall off through the bike.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child because my father was afraid that I would fall off the bike.

The auxiliary 'did' requires the base form of the main verb, so 'had' should be 'have' after 'did not'. Also 'fall off through the bike' is incorrect preposition usage; use 'fall off the bike'. Suggestion: use 'did not have' for negation in simple past and 'fall off the bike' for the correct phrase.

× But he bought me a bicycle which I usually used to ride every afternoon near my neighborhood.

✓ But he bought me a bicycle which I usually rode every afternoon near my neighborhood.

The phrase 'used to ride' is redundant with 'usually' and 'used to' implies habitual past; choose 'usually rode' or 'used to ride'. Also 'near my neighborhood' is awkward; 'in my neighborhood' is more natural. Suggestion: 'I usually rode it every afternoon in my neighborhood' or 'I used to ride it every afternoon in my neighborhood.'

× Yes, the bikes are a lot popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.

The phrase 'a lot popular' is ungrammatical. Use 'very popular' or 'a lot of' with a noun. Also the definite article 'the' is unnecessary when speaking generally about bikes. Suggestion: 'Bikes are very popular in my country.'

× People usually use to buy bikes instead of cars because there is a lot of traffic in my city and people can also not afford such high budget cars so they just buy bikes to perform their daily tasks.

✓ People usually buy bikes instead of cars because there is a lot of traffic in my city and many people cannot afford high-priced cars, so they buy bikes to do their daily tasks.

'Use to buy' is incorrect; for habitual actions in present simple say 'usually buy' or 'used to' for past habit. 'Can also not afford' is awkward; 'cannot afford' is correct. 'Such high budget cars' is incorrect collocation; use 'high-priced cars' or 'expensive cars'. 'Perform their daily tasks' is grammatically okay but 'do their daily tasks' sounds more natural. Suggestion: simplify to 'People usually buy bikes... many people cannot afford expensive cars... so they buy bikes to do their daily tasks.'