自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid filler words (uh, um) and repeated phrases. Also correct small grammar issues (use simple past: “I wasn’t allowed” or “I didn’t have”).

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my parents didn’t allow me to ride vehicles for safety reasons. For example, they worried about traffic near our house, so I usually walked or took the bus instead.

建議: Give a clearer, more structured answer: state your opinion, then provide two specific reasons with linking words (for example, because / moreover / for instance). Use plural and quantifiers correctly (e.g., “bikes are popular,” “many people”). Reduce hesitations and choose precise vocabulary (convenient, affordable, eco-friendly).

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Firstly, many people find them convenient and cheap for short trips, and secondly, cycling helps reduce traffic and pollution. For instance, commuters often use bikes to travel to nearby markets or stations.

× Did you, Well, uh, when I was a child, I did not have a bike because I was not allowed to uh, ride any kind of vehicles.

✓ Well, when I was a child, I did not have a bike because I was not allowed to ride any kind of vehicle.

Use of past tense is correct ('did not have', 'was not allowed'), but 'any kind of vehicles' mixes singular/plural with 'any kind of' which should be followed by a singular noun 'vehicle' here. Remove extraneous filler and commas for clarity and fluency. Suggestion: keep past tense verbs and use 'any kind of vehicle' to be grammatically consistent.

× So the limit the because I, I was under restriction, so I, I did not have a bike that time.

✓ There was a restriction on me, so I did not have a bike at that time.

Original sentence is disfluent and incorrectly ordered. 'So the limit the because I' is ungrammatical. Use 'There was a restriction on me' or 'I was under restriction' to state the reason, and use 'at that time' for referring to the past. This fixes sentence structure and makes the cause-effect clear.

× Umm, actually, yeah, bike is very popular in my country because, umm, most of people are willing to ride bikes, it's quite convenient and uh, umm, like uh, easy to carry everywhere and ride in uh, it's like uh, reduced traffic.

✓ Umm, actually, yeah, bikes are very popular in my country because most people are willing to ride them; they're quite convenient, easy to take everywhere, and they help reduce traffic.

Multiple issues: use plural 'bikes are' instead of 'bike is' for general statements (subject-verb agreement and singular/plural). 'Most of people' should be 'most people'. Replace 'ride bikes' with 'ride them' for cohesion. 'Easy to carry everywhere' is better as 'easy to take everywhere'. 'Reduced traffic' needs an active phrasing 'they help reduce traffic.' These changes correct number agreement and improve collocation and fluency.

× So that is why it's quite uh, popular in.

✓ So that is why they are quite popular.

Original ends abruptly with a preposition 'in' without an object and has filler. Use 'they are quite popular' to refer back to bikes. This fixes sentence structure and completes the idea.