自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clear and grammatically correct, use a topic sentence then 1–2 supporting details with correct verb tenses and word choice. Avoid redundancy and keep within 3–4 sentences. Use linking words (for example, and, so, because) to make it coherent. Also correct vocabulary (say 'tricycle' and 'bicycle' and avoid 'dry cycle').

範例: Yes. I had a small red tricycle when I was a child, which I shared with my sister. We often rode it to the park near our house and played there together. Those afternoons are a very fond memory because we spent so much time outdoors and laughing.

建議: Start with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons and a brief personal example. Use correct collocations (e.g. 'popular among young people', 'powerful motorbikes') and correct grammar (use past simple for past events, and complete clauses). Limit to 3–4 sentences and use linking words like 'however' or 'but' to contrast general trend and personal view.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular, especially powerful motorbikes among young people in my country. However, I personally avoid them because I do not think they are very safe. When I was a child I had an accident which left me quite nervous about riding, so I prefer other forms of transport.

× Me and my sister shared that dry cycle.

✓ My sister and I shared that tricycle.

The subject order should place others before 'I' and use the correct singular noun form 'tricycle' instead of 'dry cycle' (likely a misheard form). Also use 'My sister and I' for correct grammar and politeness.

× We go out in a park which is very near to our house and play there without dry cycles.

✓ We went to a park that was very near our house and played there without tricycles.

Tense should match past ('went', 'played') because the context is childhood. Use 'to a park' not 'in a park' when indicating going to a place. Use 'that was' instead of 'which is' to maintain past tense. Use plural 'tricycles' if referring to multiple; corrected 'tricycles' replaces 'dry cycles'.

× It was very beautiful memory.

✓ It was a very beautiful memory.

English requires an article before singular countable nouns. Add 'a' before 'very beautiful memory' to form a grammatically correct noun phrase.

× Apparently there's a very good craze among youngsters having heavy bike, but I never find bike as a safe vehicle to drive.

✓ Apparently there's a strong craze among youngsters for heavy bikes, but I never find bikes to be a safe vehicle to ride.

Use plural 'bikes' when speaking generally. 'Craze for' is the correct prepositional phrase. 'Strong' fits better than 'very good' to describe craze. Use 'ride' rather than 'drive' for bikes and 'find ... to be' for correct construction.

× Actually I'm a bit scared of it due to my traumatic experience when I was a child I got hurt by.

✓ Actually I'm a bit scared of it because of a traumatic experience when I was a child: I got hurt by one.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks an object for 'got hurt by.' Use 'because of' for reason, add a colon or restructure to connect clauses, and supply 'one' to indicate 'one (bike)' or rephrase further. Maintain present tense 'I'm' for current feeling and past tense 'I got hurt' for the event.