自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and direct in the topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Avoid contradicting ideas (practiced but still not good) without explanation. Use a linking word to connect the practice to your current ability and add a brief reason or example.

範例: No, I didn't own a bike as a child. However, my father had one and I practiced riding it with him a few times, so I learned the basics but never became confident because I only practiced occasionally and fell often.

建議: Start with a clear direct answer (Yes/No) then support it with specific details and a linking phrase. Use a variety of vocabulary (commonly, particularly, commute, recreational) and avoid repeating words like “bikes” too often. Provide one brief reason and an example or comparison to strengthen your response.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, although popularity varies by area. For example, in my town many people own bicycles and typically cycle between 4 and 5 PM for leisure or light exercise, because cycling is an easy and affordable way to keep fit compared with joining a gym.

× No, I didn't, but my father used to have one and I practiced with it.

✓ No, I didn't, but my father used to have one and I practiced with it.

Although the sentence is generally acceptable, there is a subtle issue of parallel aspect: 'used to have' (past habitual) followed by 'I practiced' (simple past) is grammatical, but if the student meant ongoing or repeated practice in childhood it would be clearer to use 'I used to practice with it.' To follow the same past habitual structure and avoid possible ambiguity, use the present participle in the habitual form 'used to practice' or keep 'practiced' if referring to specific past events. Suggestion: choose one consistent past habitual construction: 'My father used to have one and I used to practice with it.' or 'My father had one and I practiced with it.'

× But I'm still not good at riding a bike.

✓ But I'm still not good at riding a bike.

The sentence is grammatically correct; however, 'riding a bike' is a gerund phrase functioning as object of the preposition 'at'. No tense change needed. If the intent is to emphasize a continuing state, 'I still am not good at riding a bike' or 'I still don't ride a bike well' are alternatives. No correction required unless stylistic improvement is desired.

× I think so, but it depends on the place.

✓ I think so, but it depends on the place.

This sentence is grammatically correct. 'I think' uses present simple appropriately for opinion and 'it depends' correctly expresses conditional variability. No correction needed.

× Here in my town, most of my neighbors have bikes and they usually ride their bikes around 4:00 to 5:00 PM and I think it's popular among them because it's an easier exercise.

✓ Here in my town, most of my neighbors have bikes, and they usually ride them from 4:00 to 5:00 PM. I think it's popular among them because it's an easy form of exercise.

Problems: a) Repetition and wordiness: 'ride their bikes' is repetitive after 'have bikes'; using the pronoun 'them' is more concise. b) Preposition and time expression: 'around 4:00 to 5:00 PM' is awkward; use 'from 4:00 to 5:00 PM' or 'around 4:00 or 5:00 PM.' c) Adjective/adverb and collocation: 'an easier exercise' compares with an implied alternative without stating it; use 'an easy form of exercise' to describe its simplicity without an explicit comparison. Corrections improve clarity and grammar: replace repeated noun with pronoun, adjust time phrase, and use correct noun phrase for exercise.