自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise, correct grammar, and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, use one or two supporting details, and limit to 3–4 sentences. Fix tense and article errors (e.g., “a two-wheeler bicycle” → “a two-wheeler” or “a bicycle”).

範例: Yes. I had a two-wheeler bicycle when I was a child. As I grew older, I switched to a two-wheeler scooter because it was faster and easier to ride in town.

建議: Organize your answer with a clear main point, then give two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., “because”, “so”, “therefore”). Avoid repetition and improve vocabulary: use “scooters” not “scooties,” and correct collocations like “affordable to everyone.” Keep to 3–4 sentences maximum.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many roads are narrow and cars are expensive for most people. Therefore, motorcycles and scooters are a practical and affordable way to commute. They are also convenient for short trips and parking in crowded areas.

× Yes I had a 2 Wheeler bicycle when I was a child but but when I grown up to a young age then I had a 2 Wheeler scooty.

✓ Yes, I had a 2-wheeler bicycle when I was a child, but when I grew up I had a 2-wheeler scooter.

The sentence mixes past tense forms incorrectly. 'grown up' is a past participle and must be used with an auxiliary (have/was) or replaced with the simple past 'grew up' to match the narrative. Also remove the duplicated 'but' and simplify the clause order. Use 'scooter' instead of informal 'scooty' and hyphenate '2-wheeler'. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense (e.g., 'I grew up') and avoid repeated words.

× Yes, I do think that bikes are most popular thing in my own country because in my country the roads are not that much wider and cars are not the affordable thing that everyone can afford.

✓ Yes, I do think that bikes are the most popular thing in my country because the roads are not very wide and cars are not affordable for everyone.

Missing definite article before 'most popular' and incorrect article usage before 'affordable thing'. 'Most popular' needs 'the' when comparing within a country. 'Not that much wider' is awkward and should be 'not very wide'. 'Not the affordable thing that everyone can afford' is redundant; use 'not affordable for everyone'. Suggestion: Use 'the most popular' and simpler adjective phrases like 'not very wide' and 'not affordable for everyone'.

× And the bicycles and the scooties or bikes are the only thing that can be afford afford by each and every individual and they are very convenient also to travel.

✓ Bicycles and scooters are the only things that many individuals can afford, and they are also very convenient for travel.

Plural noun-pronoun agreement and pronoun use are incorrect: 'the bicycles and the scooties or bikes are the only thing' should be plural 'things'. 'Afford' needs to be in active form 'can afford' with 'afford' as a verb; remove the duplicated 'afford'. 'Each and every individual' is wordy; use 'many individuals' or 'everyone'. 'They are very convenient also to travel' is awkward; use 'convenient for travel' or 'convenient to travel by'. Suggestion: Ensure noun number matches (things), remove duplicates, and use natural collocations like 'convenient for travel'.