自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Good answer: direct, coherent and personal. To improve, make the response slightly more concise and varied in vocabulary, avoid repeating phrases like “I actually,” and include one specific brief detail (e.g., where you rode or a memorable moment) using a linking word to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I had a bike as a child. I often rode it on weekends with my family, especially along the riverside path, and I taught my younger brother to balance on two wheels, which is one of my fondest memories.

建議: Answer is relevant but a little repetitive and ends abruptly. To improve, remove filler words like “actually,” complete the final sentence, add a linking word (e.g., ‘moreover’ or ‘because’) and give one concrete example or statistic to make it specific.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular, especially among children and older adults. Many children cycle to school, and older people ride daily for exercise; moreover, students increasingly choose bikes to reduce air pollution and save money on transport.

× I actually used to bike on weekends with my family.

✓ I actually used to ride a bike on weekends with my family.

The verb 'used to' should be followed by the base form of the verb. While 'bike' can be a verb in informal use, 'ride a bike' is the more natural collocation in this context. Use the base verb 'ride' after 'used to' for clarity and idiomatic correctness.

× I especially remember biking with my younger brother and I actually taught him how to ride a bike and I have a lot of fond memories of riding it.

✓ I especially remember biking with my younger brother; I actually taught him how to ride a bike, and I have a lot of fond memories of it.

The original sentence uses 'and I actually taught him' which is grammatically acceptable, but the sentence is run-on and repeats 'ride a bike' and 'riding it' awkwardly. The pronoun 'it' should clearly refer to 'a bike', so restructure the sentence and add appropriate punctuation to avoid a run-on. Use a semicolon or separate sentences and replace 'riding it' with 'it' for clarity.

× A lot of children ride their bikes to their school and older people tend to use bicycles every day for health benefits.

✓ A lot of children ride their bikes to school, and older people tend to use bicycles every day for health benefits.

In English, we usually say 'ride to school' rather than 'ride to their school' when referring to the general activity of attending school. Removing 'their' makes the sentence more natural. Also add a comma before 'and' to join two independent clauses correctly.

× And actually a lot of students nowadays try to use bicycles because they don't want to pollute the air and.

✓ Actually, a lot of students nowadays try to use bicycles because they don't want to pollute the air.

The original sentence ends with a dangling conjunction 'and' and is a sentence fragment. Remove the unnecessary 'and' at the end and place a comma after 'Actually' to correct the sentence structure and make it a complete sentence. This yields a clear cause-and-effect statement.

× Yes, they are very popular, especially for children and older people.

✓ Yes, they are very popular, especially among children and older people.

The original sentence uses 'for' which is not wrong, but 'popular among' is the more idiomatic prepositional choice when describing groups who like or use something. This is primarily a preposition/idiom preference; adjusting it improves naturalness and correctness.