自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant and personal, but a bit long-winded at the start and slightly repetitive. To improve: 1) Begin directly with a clear topic sentence that answers the question (e.g., "Yes, I did"). 2) Keep responses concise (max 3–4 short sentences). 3) Add one or two specific supporting details (where you rode, how often, a brief memory) using a linking word (e.g., "and" or "because"). 4) Avoid redundant phrases like "growing up" repeated twice. These changes will make your response more natural and coherent.

範例: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle and rode it almost every day after school with my friends. Sometimes I would go cycling with my grandfather on weekends, and those rides are a fond memory because they helped me feel independent.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but is hesitant, unclear and negative without enough specifics. To improve: 1) Start with a clear direct opinion (Yes/No/It depends). 2) Reduce hesitations and filler words by practicing short planned phrases. 3) Provide specific evidence or examples (e.g., popularity in cities, bike lanes, cycling events, or accident statistics) and use linking words (e.g., "however", "because", "for example"). 4) Keep it to 2–3 concise sentences and avoid unsupported claims such as "many get injured on a daily basis" unless you give context. This will make your answer more convincing and fluent.

範例: It depends — biking is popular in big cities because many people use bicycles to commute and there are organised cycling events. However, cycling can be risky in some areas due to limited bike lanes, which discourages some people from riding.

× Growing up, leisure time always meant going outside and spending time during various hobbies.

✓ Growing up, leisure time always meant going outside and spending time on various hobbies.

The preposition 'during' is incorrect with 'hobbies'. Use 'on' to indicate engaging in hobbies ('spend time on hobbies'). This is a preposition choice tied to verb + -ing constructions; change 'during' to 'on' to be idiomatic.

× Sports in general are quite popular in my country, but biking and cycling is quite notorious as uh, many uh, cyclists umm, get uh, injured on a daily basis.

✓ Sports in general are quite popular in my country, but biking and cycling are quite notorious because many cyclists get injured on a daily basis.

The compound subject 'biking and cycling' is plural, so use the plural verb 'are' (subject-verb agreement). Also 'as' is not the best conjunction here; use 'because' for reason. Remove filler sounds ('uh', 'umm') for clarity.

× Uh, which umm, is umm uh, not really looking good for the sport.

✓ This is not really good for the sport.

The original is a sentence fragment beginning with 'which'; it lacks a clear antecedent connection and contains many fillers. Convert the idea into a complete sentence: 'This is not really good for the sport.' This corrects the sentence structure and improves clarity.