自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be careful with grammar and fluency. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, and correct verb forms. Use one or two supporting details connected with linking words. For example, say you didn’t have a bike, give a clear reason (legal age and not knowing how to ride), and finish with a concise additional detail if needed.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Firstly, it was illegal to ride motorcycles under 18 in my area, and secondly, I never learned how to ride. As a result, I always walked or used public transport to get around.

建議: Improve sentence structure and specificity. Start with a direct answer, then give two linked reasons using clear linking words (for example, 'because' and 'also'). Avoid vague phrases and repetitions. Add a specific example or brief comparison to strengthen your point.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in Pakistan because they are fuel-efficient and much cheaper to run than cars. Also, they are easier to manoeuvre in heavy traffic, so many people choose bikes for short urban trips.

× Obviously not. I didn't had a bike when I was a child because first of all, it's like illegal to drive a bike when you're under 18 and second of all, uh, I didn't when I was child, I didn't even know how to ride a bike.

✓ Obviously not. I didn't have a bike when I was a child because, first of all, it's illegal to ride a bike when you're under 18 and, second of all, when I was a child I didn't even know how to ride a bike.

The error is incorrect past tense form after the auxiliary 'did'. After 'did' the base form of the verb must be used, so 'didn't had' should be 'didn't have' (Past tense issue). Also 'ride' is more appropriate than 'drive' for a bicycle and the phrase 'when I was child' needs the article 'a'. Suggestions: use 'didn't have', replace 'drive' with 'ride' for bikes, and include 'a' before 'child'.

× Yes, the bikes are quite popular in my country because they are fuel efficient first of all, and as in Pakistan, the road, there's very heavy traffic in roads, so it's quite popular.

✓ Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are fuel-efficient, and in Pakistan the roads have very heavy traffic, so they are quite popular.

Errors include unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'bikes' when speaking generally (Article errors), missing hyphen in 'fuel-efficient' (adjective form), awkward phrasing 'as in Pakistan, the road, there's very heavy traffic in roads' and incorrect plural/article in 'road(s)'. Suggestion: remove 'the' to talk about bikes in general, use 'fuel-efficient' as a compound adjective, say 'in Pakistan the roads have very heavy traffic' and use 'they' to refer back to bikes.