自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid repetition; give a clear topic sentence then one brief supporting detail. Use linking words to join reason and brief consequence. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., "own" instead of repeating "have a bike").

範例: No, I didn’t own a bike as a child. My parents didn’t allow me to ride one for safety reasons, so I only learned to cycle much later.

建議: Improve accuracy and clarity: correct sentence structure, avoid vague phrases, and give specific examples with linking words. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "deliveries" not "trays") and remove filler words like "etcetera." Keep to under five sentences.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Almost every child owns a bicycle, and many adults use them too; for instance, mountain bikes are common for leisure and electric bikes are widely used for commuting and deliveries.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents never allowed me to ride one for safety reasons, so I never had a bike throughout my childhood.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents never allowed me to ride one for safety reasons, so I never owned a bike throughout my childhood.

The original sentence uses 'had' twice which is grammatical but repetitive and less precise. This is a subject-verb agreement / verb choice clarity issue (closely related to subject-verb agreement and sentence structure). Replacing the second 'had' with 'owned' avoids repetition and clarifies meaning. Suggestion: vary verb choice and ensure consistency in tense; here simple past is correct so use 'owned' to improve clarity.

× Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Almost every child has one and many adults use different types too. For example, mountain bikes for ride for trays, electric bikes for commuting this, etcetera.

✓ Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Almost every child has one and many adults use different types too. For example, mountain bikes for riding on trails, electric bikes for commuting, etc.

The original third sentence has multiple sentence structure and verb form errors: 'for ride' is incorrect; the correct gerund form is 'for riding'. 'for trays' is likely a typo for 'trails'. 'commuting this' is incorrect and unnecessary; use 'commuting'. These are sentence structure and verb form issues. Suggestions: use the gerund after 'for' (for riding), check spelling ('trails'), and remove extraneous words ('this'); keep parallel structure in a list ('for riding on trails, for commuting').