自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct repetition/errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating phrases and correct tense use (e.g., "I used to" or "I would").

範例: Yes, I had a bike as a child. I loved riding it to the park for exercise and to meet friends, and I often rode on weekends because my parents encouraged outdoor activities.

建議: Give a clear opinion, explain reasons with specific details, and avoid unclear phrases. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "however") and correct vocabulary ("laws" vs "Laos"). Provide one or two concrete reasons or examples.

範例: No, I don't think cycling is very popular in Japan. For example, many people prefer public transport because cities are congested, and strict traffic laws and limited safe cycling lanes discourage casual riding.

× 'I really love to go out outside and do some activities.'

✓ 'I really love to go outside and do activities.'

'Love' expresses a general present habit, so present simple is correct, but 'go out outside' is redundant. Use either 'go out' or 'go outside,' and 'do some activities' is wordy; 'do activities' is more natural.

× 'So when I go to the park and do some activities, I used to bike.'

✓ 'So when I went to the park and did activities, I used to ride my bike.'

'Used to' indicates a past habitual action, so the time clause should be in past tense ('went,' 'did'). Also 'bike' as a verb is informal; 'ride my bike' is clearer and more natural.

× 'Unfortunately, no, I don't think it's popular in my country.'

✓ 'Unfortunately, no, I don't think bikes are popular in my country.'

'It' is unclear here. The question asks about bikes (plural), so the subject should match. Use 'bikes are' to refer clearly to the topic; present simple is appropriate for general statements.

× 'My country is Japan, and now we have a lot of Laos about bicycles.'

✓ 'My country is Japan, and nowadays we have a lot of laws about bicycles.'

The original uses 'Laos' which is incorrect; likely meant 'laws.' Also 'now' plus 'we have a lot of laws' is better expressed as 'nowadays.' Ensure correct word choice and preposition use; no preposition needed here.

× 'So everyone is too lazy about that, so they don't do it.'

✓ 'So people are too uninterested in cycling, and they don't do it.'

'Lazy about that' is awkward and ambiguous. 'Uninterested in cycling' more precisely describes lack of interest. Also replace 'everyone' with 'people' for naturalness. This fixes adjective/adverb choice and improves clarity.