自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words (umm, uh), and use past tense consistently. Add one specific detail (e.g., why you wanted a bike or a memorable moment) and use a linking word to connect ideas. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child because my parents couldn’t afford one. However, I often wished I had one because I wanted to ride with my friends to the park. It was disappointing, but I learned to enjoy walking and playing games with them instead.

建議: Answer directly, reduce hesitations, and use clear linking words. State a general opinion, support it with a specific reason/example (e.g., availability of shared bikes, commuting habits), and avoid tense confusion. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use varied vocabulary (commute, widespread, convenient).

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular, mainly because shared bike services are widespread and convenient. For example, I use a shared bike to commute to school every day, which saves time and is affordable.

× I do not have a bike.

✓ I did not have a bike.

The question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so the verb should be in the past tense. Use 'did not have' for past simple negative instead of present 'do not have'. Suggestion: Use past simple for habits or facts in the past (I did not have a bike).

× When I was a child, I would wish to have a bike a but my parents didn't want to buy one for me.

✓ When I was a child, I wished I could have a bike, but my parents didn't want to buy one for me.

'Would wish' is incorrect here. To describe a past desire, use past simple ('wished') or 'I wanted'. Also remove extra 'a' and use 'wished I could have' or 'wished I had'. Suggestion: Use 'wished' or 'wanted' to express past desires and keep clauses clear (When I was a child, I wished I could have a bike).

× Umm, it was a pity umm, and then I wish I could have one, uh, when I was young.

✓ It was a pity, and I wished I could have one when I was young.

Mixing past context with present 'wish' is incorrect. Use past tense 'wished' to match 'was' and 'when I was young'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent; use past tense for wishes about past events (I wished I could have one).

× Umm, yes, bikes are popular in the country they're currently in, especially those commercial shared bikes.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country, especially the commercial shared bikes.

Phrase 'in the country they're currently in' is awkward and unclear. Use 'in my country' for clarity and correct reference. Also use 'the' before 'commercial shared bikes' to specify that type. Suggestion: Simplify and clarify references (Yes, bikes are popular in my country, especially the commercial shared bikes).

× They are everywhere, all around my neighborhood.

✓ They are everywhere around my neighborhood.

Original is understandable but wordy; removing 'all' and comma improves fluency. Tense 'are' is correct for present general fact. Suggestion: Use concise phrasing for spoken answers (They are everywhere around my neighborhood).

× Umm, I used to umm, I'm currently riding those bikes every day.

✓ I used to, but now I'm currently riding those bikes every day.

Mixes 'used to' (past habit) with 'I'm currently' without contrast connector. Insert 'but now' to show change from past to present. 'I'm currently riding' is grammatically acceptable for present continuous. Suggestion: Use connectors to show contrast (I used to, but now I ride those bikes every day).

× Umm, to the school and back to home.

✓ I ride them to school and back home.

Sentence fragment lacking subject and verb. Also 'to the school' is unnecessary article: use 'to school' and 'back home' instead of 'back to home'. Suggestion: Include subject and verb and correct prepositional usage (I ride them to school and back home).