自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and relevant: answer the question about having a bike, not a bag. Use a clear topic sentence, correct tense, avoid hesitation, and give one or two short supporting details with linking words. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I did. My grandfather gave me a small bicycle when I was seven, and I used it to ride to school and visit friends. It was practical and helped me become more independent.

建議: Improve fluency and clarity: state your opinion clearly, use linking words to explain reasons, avoid repetition and filler words, and use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'bike' not 'back'). Provide a specific reason or example to support your view.

範例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country, because our cities have extensive public transport systems. For example, many people prefer the subway and buses since they are faster and more convenient for long commutes.

× Yes I have I my grandpa gave me a bag as a birthday gift and uh, the bag is not expensive but it's practical for me to go to school more easily.

✓ Yes, I had one. My grandpa gave me a bag as a birthday gift. The bag was not expensive, but it was practical and made it easier for me to go to school.

Problems: mixture of present and past tenses and missing words create confusing sentence structure (Grammar problem types 5 Past tense issue, 6 Present tense issue, 26 Sentence structure errors). The question asked about having a bike when the student was a child, so past tense should be used consistently. Also 'I have I' is a duplication and missing article/verb in the clause. Suggestions: use past tense verbs for past situations ('had', 'gave', 'was'), split into shorter sentences, and add linking words ('and made it easier') for clarity.

× Uh, I don't think so, uh, because umm, uh, there are many, uh, transport, transport choice, uh, you can, you can make uh, like subway. I think subway is more, more popular than by than riding back.

✓ I don't think so because there are many transport options. You can take the subway, which I think is more popular than riding a bike.

Problems: incorrect noun form and word choice 'transport choice' should be 'transport options' (Grammar problem types 1 Singular and plural issue and 13 Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). Awkward phrasing 'you can make like subway' and repeated words cause sentence structure errors (26 Sentence structure errors). 'Riding back' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'riding a bike'. Suggestions: use 'transport options' or 'modes of transport', use 'take the subway', and compare clearly: 'more popular than riding a bike'.