自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar and sentence structure: use correct past tense and possessive forms, and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. For example, say you did not own a bike because of financial reasons, then mention how you gained experience by borrowing and a specific memory or feeling. Keep answers concise (max 4–5 sentences).

範例: I didn’t have my own bike as a child because my family couldn’t afford one. However, I learned to ride by borrowing my cousin’s bike, and we spent many afternoons cycling around our neighborhood. I remember feeling excited and free when I first rode without training wheels.

建議: Make the reply more natural and specific: use plural forms and give clear reasons with linking words. Begin with a topic sentence, then add two specific reasons (transport and exercise) with linking words like “because” and “also”. Avoid vague phrases like “gain more strength and happy.”

範例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. Many people use them for daily commuting because they are cheap and convenient, and others cycle for exercise and leisure because it keeps them fit and reduces stress.

× I don't have a bike when I was a child because we don't have much money in my mother can't afford to buy a bike.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child because we didn't have much money and my mother couldn't afford to buy one.

Tense consistency: the sentence mixes present tense ('don't have') with past context ('when I was a child'). Use past simple ('didn't have', 'didn't have much', 'couldn't afford') for past situations. Also combine clauses correctly ('and my mother couldn't afford') and use 'one' to avoid repetition.

× But I can ride a bike together with my my cousin because she has his her bike and we really enjoy bike doing riding together in bike.

✓ But I could ride a bike with my cousin because she had her bike, and we really enjoyed riding together.

Pronoun consistency and tense: use past modal 'could' for ability in the past. Remove duplicate words ('my my') and incorrect mixed pronouns ('she has his her') — use 'she had her bike'. Use the correct verb form 'enjoyed riding' rather than awkward 'enjoy bike doing riding'. Also avoid repeating 'bike' unnecessarily.

× Yes, bike is really popular in our country, not just for everyday use, but also to the cyclists really want to enjoy cycling and to have exercise and to gain more strength and happy.

✓ Yes, bikes are really popular in our country, not just for everyday use, but also because many cyclists want to enjoy cycling, exercise, gain strength, and feel happy.

Use plural 'bikes are' to match general statement. Replace 'to the cyclists really want' with 'because many cyclists want' for correct conjunction and meaning. Use parallel gerunds ('enjoy cycling, exercise, gain strength') and 'feel happy' to correct adjective/adverb use.