自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammatical accuracy and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundant or incorrect verb forms (e.g. “did have had”), and limit filler words. Use linking words to order details (e.g. “then”, “after that”) and be specific about the memory (age, why it was memorable). Keep the answer to no more than 4–5 concise sentences.

範例: Yes. I had a bike as a child — in fact I owned two. When I was about eight, I remember coming home from school and seeing a brand-new bike parked outside our house. I ran in excitedly to tell my father, and that moment stayed with me because I hadn’t expected such a gift.

建議: Make the response more coherent and reduce repetition. Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then give two concise, linked reasons using appropriate linking words (e.g. “because”, “also”, “for example”). Correct small errors and avoid fragmented phrases (e.g. “it's easy to Co”). Add a specific example or statistic if possible to strengthen the answer.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. This is because they are cheap to run — you don’t need to pay for fuel — and they are much faster than cars in heavy traffic. For example, many people use bikes to commute to work or run errands in crowded cities because it saves both time and money.

× Actually, I did have had a bike when I was a child.

✓ Actually, I did have a bike when I was a child.

The sentence incorrectly uses both the auxiliary 'did' and the past form 'had' together ('did have had'), causing redundancy. In past simple emphasis you use 'did' + base form ('did have') or just the past form ('I had'). Use 'I did have a bike' to emphasize or 'I had a bike' for a neutral statement.

× Uh, when I was once, I was coming from my school and I saw the bike parked.

✓ When I was young, I was coming back from school and I saw a bike parked.

The phrase 'when I was once' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'when I was once' -> 'when I was young' or 'once'. Also 'coming from my school' is acceptable but 'coming back from school' is more natural. 'the bike' suggests a specific bike not introduced; use 'a bike' if new information. Revise to 'When I was young, I was coming back from school and I saw a bike parked.'

× I saw a new bike parked outside my home.

✓ I saw a new bike parked outside my house.

Use 'house' rather than 'home' in this context for location of a parked object; 'outside my house' is more natural. The article 'a' is correct here because the bike is indefinite.

× I ran into the house and my father was there.

✓ I ran into the house and found my father there.

The original sentence is understandable but sounds incomplete; adding 'found' clarifies the action and improves sentence flow: 'I ran into the house and found my father there.'

× It doesn't get out of my mind.

✓ It doesn't get out of my mind.

This sentence is acceptable but slightly awkward; a more natural expression is 'It never leaves my mind' or 'It stays in my mind.' No grammatical correction required; alternative suggested for improved idiomatic phrasing.

× Yeah, bikes are really popular in my country because it's easy to Co, it's easy to go one place to another and there is no fuel expense because my in my country fuel is very expensive and it gets pretty intense because of traffic too.

✓ Yeah, bikes are really popular in my country because it's easy to go from one place to another and there is little fuel expense since fuel is very expensive in my country and traffic can be intense.

Multiple issues: 'Co' appears to be a typo and was removed. Use 'go from one place to another' rather than 'go one place to another.' 'There is no fuel expense' is inaccurate; better 'there is little fuel expense' or 'it is fuel-efficient.' The phrase 'my in my country fuel is very expensive' has wrong word order; correct to 'fuel is very expensive in my country.' Also 'it gets pretty intense because of traffic too' is vague; 'traffic can be intense' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× If you have a bike, you can get one place to another very easily and it's affordable and you can get your daily tasks done.

✓ If you have a bike, you can get from one place to another very easily; it's affordable and helps you complete your daily tasks.

Replace 'get one place to another' with 'get from one place to another.' Use a semicolon or separate clauses for clarity. 'You can get your daily tasks done' is understandable but 'helps you complete your daily tasks' is more natural and idiomatic.