自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 질문에 직접적으로 응답하고 있으나 문법 오류와 어휘 선택, 그리고 자연스러운 연결 표현이 부족합니다. 반복되는 표현(‘take a bike’)과 시제·관사 사용 오류(‘when I was young’, ‘a bike’)를 고쳐야 합니다. 또한 이유를 더 구체적으로 설명하고 간결한 문장 구조(최대 3~4문장)를 사용하세요. 예를 들어 두 번째 문장은 이유를 명확히 하며 연결어(for example, because, so)를 사용해 보세요.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because I wasn’t comfortable riding one. For example, I felt nervous about balancing on two wheels and I preferred walking or taking public transport.

建議: 좋은 시작입니다. 그러나 문법(단수/복수: ‘bikes’), 불완전한 문장(‘because.’ 뒤 내용 연결), 그리고 구체성 부족을 개선해야 합니다. 연결어(and, so, therefore)와 구체적 예시(도시의 교통 혼잡, 학생들의 통학)를 포함해 2~3문장으로 명확히 표현하세요. 또한 ‘common’ 대신 ‘popular’나 ‘widely used’를 상황에 맞게 사용하세요.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in Korea because cities are crowded and people often need a quick way to commute. For example, many students and office workers use bicycles for short trips to school or nearby stations.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was young because I don't like to take a bike and I also I'm afraid of taking bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was young because I didn't like to ride a bike, and I was also afraid of riding one.

The student mixed past and present tenses. The question asks about the past, so reasons should be in the past tense. Use 'didn't like' (past) instead of 'don't like'. Use the correct verb collocation 'ride a bike' rather than 'take a bike'. Use consistent pronoun/reference: 'riding one' or 'riding a bike'. Improve fluency by combining clauses with 'and' and using past tense 'was afraid'.

× Yes, I think bike is common in Korea because. Umm, there are so many people in the city and we need to commute or go to school.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are common in Korea because there are so many people in the cities and we need to commute or go to school.

Use plural 'bikes' to match 'are common'. Remove the dangling 'because.' and join the clause: 'because there are...'. 'City' is better as plural 'cities' when referring generally to urban areas, or keep singular and change article; consistency is important. Use present tense 'are' and maintain subject-verb agreement.