自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and correct grammar, answer the question directly, and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct pronunciation and word choice (e.g. "high"->"young" or remove) and avoid repeating words like "strictly".

範例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My parents never bought one for me, partly because motorbikes are strictly regulated in my country and require a licence, so my family preferred not to get one.

建議: Give a clear opinion, then support it with specific reasons and examples. Use linking words (for example, however, because) and correct grammar (e.g. "people who have licenses" not "persons"; "can't ride" not "can't write"). Avoid trailing off and repetition.

範例: Yes, I think motorcycles are popular in my country because many people use them for daily transport. However, only licensed riders can legally use them, so while they are common in cities, regulations limit who actually rides them.

× No, I didn't have any bike when I was hi because my parents never bought me one.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents never bought me one.

The sentence uses incorrect word 'hi' instead of 'child' (word choice) and 'any bike' is unnatural with singular; after a negative past simple, 'a bike' is acceptable. Also 'when I was a child' matches the question's timeframe. Suggestion: use 'child' and 'a bike' in this context.

× Also motorbikes in my country are strictly strictly regulated and we need licence to ride them so that discouraged my family from getting them.

✓ Also, motorbikes in my country are strictly regulated and we need a licence to ride them, so that discouraged my family from getting one.

Missing comma after 'Also'; duplicate word 'strictly' removed. 'Licence' needs an indefinite article 'a licence'. 'So that discouraged my family' is awkward but acceptable past meaning; more natural: 'so that discouraged my family from getting one' with 'one' referring to 'a motorbike'. Suggestion: add 'a' before 'licence', remove duplicate adverb, and use 'one' to avoid repetition.

× Yes, of course. I think bikes are popular in my country and it was ridden by the persons who have license and those who don't have license can't write them because it's strictly regulated in my country and we have a strict laws and.

✓ Yes, of course. I think bicycles are popular in my country and they are ridden by people who have a license, while those who don't have a license can't ride them because it's strictly regulated in my country and we have strict laws.

Mixed tenses and incorrect verb forms: 'it was ridden' is wrong for general present statement; use present 'are ridden' or 'people ride them'. 'The persons' is unnatural; use 'people'. 'License' needs article 'a license'. 'Can't write' is a misspelling; should be 'can't ride'. 'We have a strict laws' mixes singular adjective with plural noun; use 'strict laws' without 'a'. Suggestions: use present tense for general facts, correct verb 'ride', use 'people', include 'a' before 'license', and match adjective-noun number.