自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be accurate and direct in your topic sentence, use past tense consistently, avoid incorrect words (e.g. 'bag' instead of 'bike'), and keep answers concise (max 5 sentences). Add one clear supporting detail with a linking word to make it coherent.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small bike with two training wheels to help me keep my balance, and I used to ride it in a nearby park. For example, my mother often took me there on weekends so I could practice safely.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, use correct verb forms and concise linking words (e.g. 'because', 'so'). Provide a specific example or reason and keep to 2–3 sentences to be natural and effective.

範例: Yes, bikes are becoming very popular in my country. This is because traffic congestion in big cities makes cycling a faster and cheaper option for many commuters, so more people choose bikes to get to work or school.

× Yes, I have a bag when I was very young and it was a special bag with two extra wheels to help me keep balance.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was very young, and it was a special bike with two extra wheels to help me keep my balance.

The student used present-tense 'have' with past time 'when I was very young' causing a tense mismatch (Present tense issue, ID 6). They also used 'bag' instead of 'bike' which appears to be a lexical error; correcting to 'bike' keeps meaning consistent. Additionally, 'keep balance' needs a possessive pronoun 'my' to be natural. Suggestion: use past tense 'had' for past events and include 'my' before 'balance'. Note: I flagged the primary error as incorrect use of pronouns because of the missing possessive 'my', but tense was also corrected to match the past context.

× I remember that my mother brought me to a small park near our neighborhood.

✓ I remember that my mother brought me to a small park near our neighborhood.

This sentence is already correct: past tense 'brought' properly matches the recalled past event. No change needed. Explanation: Keep past simple for completed past actions; sentence is grammatically correct.

× Yes, definitely.

✓ Yes, definitely.

Short answer 'Yes, definitely.' is acceptable and matches the present-tense question about general popularity. No correction needed.

× Actually I find I find it has been more and more popular in many cities with large populations because in those cities traffic jams has become a major problem and those people who need to go to work or go to school.

✓ Actually, I find that bicycles have become more and more popular in many large cities because traffic jams have become a major problem, especially for people who need to go to work or school.

Multiple errors: repetition 'I find I find' (sentence structure error, ID 26) was removed. 'It has been more and more popular' is awkward and uses 'it' incorrectly; use plural 'bicycles' or 'they' for clarity (singular/plural issue, ID 1). 'Traffic jams has' is subject-verb agreement error; plural subject 'traffic jams' needs 'have' (subject-verb agreement, ID 27). The clause 'and those people who need to go to work or go to school' was incomplete; turned into a clear subordinate clause 'especially for people who need to go to work or school.' Suggestions: avoid repeated words, match subject and verb number, use clearer plural noun for general statements, and simplify the final clause.