自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Shorten and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and long, run-on sentences. Also use a slightly wider range of vocabulary (e.g., ‘terrified’ or ‘nervous’, ‘persuade’).

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child. I was terrified of falling, so even when my cousins tried to teach me, I refused. As a result, I convinced my father that cycling wasn’t for me, and I preferred other hobbies like reading and drawing.

建議: Good direct answer and relevant details. Improve by adding one linking phrase and a specific example or comparison, and vary vocabulary (e.g., ‘widespread’, ‘affordable’, ‘useful for short-distance transport’). Keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences).

範例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and practical, especially in rural areas. For example, farmers often use bikes to carry produce like cassava from fields to nearby markets. In contrast, people in cities tend to prefer motorbikes or cars for longer commutes.

× I didn't have a bike as a child because I was scared that I would fall and hurt myself and so many occasions I had cousins who tried to teach me to ride the bicycle, but I was so afraid and I had to convince my father that riding the bicycle is not for me.

✓ I didn't have a bike as a child because I was scared that I would fall and hurt myself. On many occasions my cousins tried to teach me to ride the bicycle, but I was so afraid and I had to convince my father that riding a bicycle was not for me.

Multiple past tense and sentence-structure issues: 'so many occasions I had cousins who tried' is awkward and should be 'On many occasions my cousins tried' to show past repeated actions. Also maintain past tense consistently: 'riding the bicycle is not for me' should be 'was not for me' to match the past narrative. Split into two sentences to fix run-on sentence. Suggestion: Use clear past-tense verbs for past events and break long run-on sentences into shorter sentences.

× I would rather do other hobbies than ride a bicycle.

✓ I would rather do other hobbies than ride a bicycle.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable, but 'a bicycle' is fine. No article change needed. Keep as is. Suggestion: Optionally 'ride bicycles' to generalize: 'rather do other hobbies than ride bicycles.'

× Yes, I believe that bicycles are popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I believe bicycles are popular in my country.

Minor wordiness: removing 'that' is natural in spoken English. Not a grammatical error but improves fluency. Suggestion: Omit unnecessary 'that' in spoken statements for conciseness.

× This is because it is a cheap and convenient means of transportation for people who live in the villages.

✓ This is because it is a cheap and convenient means of transportation for people who live in villages.

Use of definite article 'the villages' implies specific villages; general statement about rural areas should use plural without 'the'. Suggestion: Use 'in villages' or 'in rural areas' for generalization.

× When they travel to their farms to get their produce like cassava, they need the bicycle to transport it back to their various houses or to the markets.

✓ When they travel to their farms to get produce like cassava, they need bicycles to transport it back to their houses or to the markets.

Several issues: 'their produce' is acceptable but 'produce like cassava' is more natural without 'their'; 'the bicycle' implies a single bicycle, better to generalize 'bicycles' because different people use bicycles; 'various houses' is awkward — 'their houses' suffices. Match plural forms for consistency. Suggestion: Use plural nouns when speaking generally (bicycles, houses) and simplify phrasing for clarity.