自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more grammatical, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb tenses, reduce repetition, and add one specific detail. Use linking words like “and” or “after” correctly. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought me a blue bicycle and one for my brother, so we often rode together after we finished our homework. We usually cycled in the backyard or around the neighborhood and always had a lot of fun.

建議: Give a clear direct opinion first, then provide two concise and specific reasons using linking words (e.g., “because”, “however”). Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and avoid fillers like “umm”. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Not really; cycling is less popular in Hong Kong nowadays because many people prefer hiking and outdoor trails. Moreover, the roads in the city are very busy and not always safe for cyclists, so fewer people choose bikes for daily travel.

× Yes I have one.

✓ Yes, I had one.

The examiner asked about the past (when you were a child), so the student should use the past tense 'had' instead of the present 'have'. Suggestion: match verb tense to the time frame referenced (use past simple for completed past states).

× My family bought me a bike with blue color and also with they bought one for my brother.

✓ My family bought me a blue bike and also bought one for my brother.

'With blue color' is unnatural; use the adjective 'blue' before 'bike'. The clause 'and also with they bought' is ungrammatical; remove 'with' and the extra subject 'they'. Suggestion: place adjectives before nouns and avoid redundant words or pronouns in coordinated clauses.

× So we often go we often went cycling and we had a great time as we after we finished our homework we would go to the backyard to psych to do.

✓ So we often went cycling and had a great time; after we finished our homework we would go to the backyard to play.

Mixed present and past ('go' and 'went') should be consistent in past. Remove duplicate phrase 'we often'. 'Would' is acceptable for habitual past. 'Psych to do' appears to be a mispronunciation; likely intended 'play'. Suggestion: use past simple for habitual past actions and choose appropriate verbs ('play').

× And not that trendy actually, because recently, umm, there are fewer Hong Kong people go cycling as most of them actually go for hiking instead.

✓ Not really; recently, fewer Hong Kong people have been going cycling because most of them go hiking instead.

Sentence structure and tenses are inconsistent. 'There are fewer Hong Kong people go cycling' is ungrammatical. Use present perfect progressive 'have been going' or simple present 'go' to indicate a recent trend. 'Go for hiking' is incorrect; use 'go hiking'. Suggestion: use correct verb patterns after 'go' (go hiking) and choose tense to show recent change (present perfect).

× And also the road in Hong Kong are the roads of very busy.

✓ Also, the roads in Hong Kong are very busy.

Unnecessary repetition ('the road... are the roads of') and incorrect word order 'of very busy'. Use plural 'roads' to match 'are' and place adverb 'very' before adjective 'busy'. Suggestion: keep subject and verb number consistent and use correct adjective placement.

× So yeah, people do not.

✓ So yeah, people do not cycle much anymore.

'People do not' is an incomplete sentence; it lacks an object or verb phrase. Add 'cycle much anymore' to complete the idea. Suggestion: ensure sentences include both subject and predicate and complete the intended meaning.