自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Use correct tense and a clear topic sentence. Start with a direct past-tense response (e.g., "No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child."), then add one brief supporting detail. Keep it to 1–3 sentences, avoid repetition, and use linking words if adding reasons.

範例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I grew up in a low-income family, so my parents prioritized basic needs over toys. As a result, I only learned to ride a bicycle much later at school.

建議: Begin with a clear topic sentence in present tense about popularity, then give specific supporting details and use linking words for coherence. Correct grammar (e.g., "bikes are popular", "at that time") and avoid vague phrases like "a lot" without context. Limit to 2–3 sentences and include an example or comparison for specificity.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children and students who use them for short trips. For example, many kids ride to school or the market because bicycles are affordable and convenient, although my family couldn't afford one when I was young.

× No, I don't have a bike when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'don't have' with past time 'when I was a child'. Use past simple 'didn't have' to match the past time reference. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for past events: 'I didn't have a bike when I was a child.'

× Yes, I think bike is popular in that time in my country because there's a lot of children who used to ride on a bike.

✓ Yes, I think bikes were popular at that time in my country because there were a lot of children who used to ride bikes.

Several tense and number issues: 'think' can remain if speaking their opinion now about the past, but 'in that time' should be 'at that time'. 'bike is popular' mixes present with past reference; use past 'were'. 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' when speaking generally. 'there's a lot of children' is incorrect: use plural verb 'there were' and 'a lot of children' is acceptable but better as 'many children'. Also 'used to ride on a bike' is redundant; use 'used to ride bikes.' Suggestion: Maintain past tense and correct plurality: 'I think bikes were popular at that time because many children used to ride bikes.'

× But in my case we don't have enough money to buy 1, so I wasn't able to ride 1.

✓ But in my case we didn't have enough money to buy one, so I wasn't able to ride one.

The sentence mixes present tense 'don't have' with past context 'wasn't able'. Use past simple 'didn't have' to match the past narrative. Also numeric '1' should be spelled 'one' in normal speech; plurality is fine as 'one' refers to a single bike. Suggestion: Keep past tense throughout and use words instead of numerals: 'we didn't have enough money to buy one, so I wasn't able to ride one.'