自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition (e.g. "when I was a child" repeated) and correct minor grammar (use past tense consistently and correct adjective order: "a pink bicycle with Barbie characters"). Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences and use linking words if you add details (e.g. "and","because").

範例: Yes, I did. I had a pink bicycle decorated with Barbie characters that my father bought me. I loved riding it around the neighborhood because it was light and easy to handle.

建議: Give a clear direct answer first, then support it with specific reasons and examples. Use correct grammar and concise phrasing (singular/plural agreement, verb forms). Use linking words such as "because", "also", or "for example" to organize your points. Avoid repeating phrases like "who wants to". Limit to 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. Many people use them for leisure and exercise because cycling is cheap and healthy. For example, I often see families and students cycling in parks and along rivers on weekends.

× I have a lot of toys which my parents bought when I was a child.

✓ I had a lot of toys that my parents bought when I was a child.

The context is past time (when I was a child), so the verb tense should be past ('had') rather than present ('have'). Also, 'that' is preferred for defining relative clauses with people/things; this keeps the sentence natural. Suggestion: use past tense consistently for actions in the past.

× It was a color pink design with Barbie and Barbie characters I should say, and it was bought by my father.

✓ It was a pink design with Barbie characters, and my father bought it.

Use 'pink' as the adjective before 'design' rather than 'a color pink design'. Also, avoid redundant phrasing ('Barbie and Barbie characters'). Use active voice ('my father bought it') instead of passive for clarity. The original uses awkward phrasing and redundant nouns; correct to natural modifier order and subject-verb agreement.

× Based on my observation, bicycle or bicycles are really popular in our country since it doesn't only use as a source of entertainment, especially during leisure time of people, but it is also used for for people who wants to improve their lifestyle, who have who wants to have a better lifestyle.

✓ Based on my observation, bicycles are really popular in our country because they are not only used as a source of entertainment during people’s leisure time, but are also used by people who want to improve their lifestyle.

Multiple errors addressed: use plural 'bicycles' to match general statement; 'doesn't only use' is incorrect—use 'are not only used'; replace 'it' with 'they' to agree with plural; remove duplicate 'for' and extra fragments ('who have who wants'); change 'wants' to 'want' to agree with plural 'people'; use 'because' for reason. Suggestion: ensure subject and verb number agreement and avoid redundancy; keep clause structure parallel when listing uses.