自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời cần chính xác về thì, câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và lặp từ; mở rộng thêm chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: tuổi, loại xe, kỷ niệm) và dùng từ nối để mạch lạc. Cụ thể: (1) Sửa thì và cấu trúc: dùng quá khứ đơn cho sự kiện đã xảy ra (I had / my parents bought me). (2) Loại bỏ từ lặp (‘to to’). (3) Thêm 1–2 câu chi tiết cụ thể như tuổi bạn có xe, màu hoặc nơi bạn đi. (4) Dùng nối như “so” hoặc “which” để nối ý rõ ràng.

範例: Yes, I did. When I was about eight years old my parents bought me a small red bicycle, which made it much easier to ride to the primary school near our home. I remember riding with my friends every afternoon, and that bike helped me feel independent.

建議: Cần sửa lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp, tránh từ sai chính tả và ngắt câu lủng củng; cung cấp lý do cụ thể và ví dụ thực tế, dùng liên từ để kết nối ý. Cụ thể: (1) Sửa từ sai như “by” → “bicycling/bikes”, “dejong” → (likely) “their fitness” hoặc “health”. (2) Tránh cụm nói thông tục “you know” trong bài thi; thay bằng lý do rõ ràng. (3) Thêm một dẫn chứng cụ thể (ví dụ: bike lanes, cost-saving, environmental benefits). (4) Giữ câu trong giới hạn 3–4 câu.

範例: Yes, absolutely. Bikes have become increasingly popular, especially among young people, because cycling is an affordable way to commute and also a good form of exercise. For instance, many cities have built new bike lanes recently, which encourages students and office workers to cycle to work or school.

× Yes I have.

✓ Yes, I did.

The question asks about possession in the past ('Did you have... when you were a child?'), so the student should use past tense. 'Yes I have' mixes present perfect with a past time reference, which is incorrect. Use 'Yes, I did' or 'Yes, I had' to match the past context. Suggestion: Use past simple ('I did' or 'I had') when responding to questions about finished past time.

× When I was a little kid my parents bought me a bike which made me easier to to commute to school nearby.

✓ When I was a little kid, my parents bought me a bike, which made it easier for me to commute to the nearby school.

This sentence has several issues: missing commas, incorrect use of 'which made me easier to to commute' and a typo ('to to'). The clause needs an object ('it') and the prepositional phrase should be 'for me' + infinitive. Also add commas for clarity and move 'nearby' to modify 'school'. Suggestion: Insert commas to separate clauses, use 'which made it easier for me to commute to the nearby school', and remove duplicate 'to'.

× I believe that by is gaining more and more popularity these days, especially for the young people, because you know that going by bicycle is a way for dejong to exercise and improve.

✓ I believe that bicycling is gaining more and more popularity these days, especially among young people, because, you know, going by bicycle is a way to exercise and improve health.

Multiple problems: 'by' is an incorrect and unclear pronoun/word choice; 'the young people' is better as 'young people' or 'among young people'; the phrase 'for dejong' seems to be a typo and should be 'to' or 'to improve health'. Also add commas for spoken style. Use 'bicycling' or 'cycling' as the subject. Suggestion: Replace 'by' with 'bicycling' or 'cycling', use 'among young people', and correct the phrase to 'a way to exercise and improve health'.